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Chikara
June 20th, 2005, 08:07 AM
This is my very first sprite comic. Im sorry if its not that good, but its the best I could do!

http://img34.echo.cx/my.php?image=bluepaint3zp.png

Dragon-Chan
June 20th, 2005, 08:09 AM
For your first sprite comic, that was pretty good. 7/10.
Try not to make the speech bubbles so thick..if you're using the paintbrush tool, set it to the smallest brush size.

Chikara
June 20th, 2005, 08:10 AM
thanks for the tip! :D(too short)

Dragon-Chan
June 20th, 2005, 08:12 AM
You're welcome. BTW, if you still have trouble, put in an opaque speech box and line it with the square tool or the line tool (use the thinnest setting.), then use the line tool to draw a line from the bubble to the sprite saying the thing.

Draik
June 20th, 2005, 09:12 AM
It's not very good. Aviod using default Paint colours and resape the word bubbles.

Jaybob
June 22nd, 2005, 10:45 AM
hey sykora that aint very nice u cud have a few good comics in there.
Kasanai why dont u use sun ce in one of them? i really liked this 8.5/10

Draik
June 22nd, 2005, 11:33 AM
Well I'll just ignore that cuz I can't understand a thing so...
well make a better BG because that is just a line. And fix the Blaziken, it looks messed up.

~Amethyst_Callista_Moon~
June 22nd, 2005, 01:44 PM
It's good, but I couldn't tell who needed the Pepto Bismal.

Gohan
June 29th, 2005, 08:06 AM
I liked it. You could use the line tool for speech bubbles and try to use no default colors and sort of get a background in there. Better than what I could do. I'm only used to overworld... I think you should make more.

Cybex Mewtwo
June 29th, 2005, 08:10 AM
All I can say is that it's a lot better than what I put in here...you can look for it if you want. This was a little random to me, but isn't all that bad. Nice start.

~Amethyst_Callista_Moon~
July 2nd, 2005, 12:50 AM
FYI, you spelled Vaporeon wrong! :( How dare you do that!

neopolis3
July 2nd, 2005, 06:50 AM
Uh, this needs some work... First of all, try a background, it looks like they're floating around now. :\ The Blaziken looks messy too. Making the letters a bit smaller would be good... If you work on it, it could be good one day.

Chikara
July 3rd, 2005, 06:06 PM
thanks for the enlighting enthusiasim guys... you couldve held back on telling me my FIRST work was horrible! what do need to be to make you happy? a super-special-learner person whjo does EVERYTHING perfect on my FIRST try!?

thanks to the people who actually noticed that it was my first comic, who didnt tell me what was wrong with it, and decided to give me help in a nice way.

Fox♠
July 4th, 2005, 01:22 PM
accept critisism
you didnt ever see me saying"it's my first sprites leave me alone!"
and I had the meanest comments you can imaging
they'rehelping yo, you just dont realise it

neopolis3
July 5th, 2005, 01:40 AM
Exactly what vaati said. We're not just posting that to annoy you. Do you expect everyone here to reply "ZOMG GREAT 1000000/10"? If you post your work here, you have to be able to take criticism...

armadilloHD
July 5th, 2005, 02:19 AM
thanks for the enlighting enthusiasim guys... you couldve held back on telling me my FIRST work was horrible! what do need to be to make you happy? a super-special-learner person whjo does EVERYTHING perfect on my FIRST try!?

thanks to the people who actually noticed that it was my first comic, who didnt tell me what was wrong with it, and decided to give me help in a nice way.
If you can't except critism, stop making comics, you arent going to get a zomg 99/100 on the first day. We aren't going to stop calling them crap until you get the point.

You used default paint colors for the background. Try using game backgrounds. Make wordbubbles with the autoshapes tool on the bottom of the paint toolbar. Develop a script, don't just make stuff up as you go along. Run it through MS word as well. And one more thing, don't use pokemon sprites. They're good for an rpg, but in a sprite comic, more poses are needed.

Even if it's your first, you need to settle for a non-bias oppinion, because those are the only ones that really help.

Also: Pepto Bismal is for your stomach.

Eon-Rider
July 5th, 2005, 02:28 AM
That was pretty good! Cool!

~Amethyst_Callista_Moon~
July 7th, 2005, 10:06 PM
We are all giving you critisism in a nice way. You just don't get the point.

Chikara
July 23rd, 2005, 07:28 PM
Ok, I shouldnt have reacted like that. I just had a bad day...Im sorry ppls, and thanks for the tips!

Thomas
July 23rd, 2005, 07:37 PM
YIKES!!! You need alot of work.

1) Backgrounds - You should always have some sort of background in you comic. It gives it a nicer look.
2) Dialogue Boxes - For thise you should pick a shape and stick with it. Just an oval or a rectangle should be fine.
3) Sprites - Well premade sprites are always good to use, but if you do recolor them, try to use colors that blend in more. DO NOT use the preset colors in MSPAINT!
4) Frames - All frames should be the same exact size, and action from one frame shouldn't go into another frame.
5) Text - To me the text size was a little big, but that is just my opiniong. You may want to bring it down to a 10 or 12.

I hope that this helps!

PS - Don't say this was bad because this was your first try. Go check out my comic (Mario & Luigi: The XD Saga) That is my first comic, and I worked really hard on it. Look at other comics, and study thier traits and icorporate them into yours.

Orange_Flaaffy
July 23rd, 2005, 07:58 PM
Hmm..let's see here...
Ditto on the 'you need backgrounds' comments. They are very easy to get, TSR has tons of them.
Make sure your words stand out from your backgrounds. It does'nt matter *how* you make word bubbles as long as they make the text readable and go nicely with the picture overall.
As far as sprites go: Using pre-made ones are fine, tons of comics use them. But make sure when you edit them that the lines and colors match up with what is already present.
By the way, OUAP is my first comic as well...