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Cybex Mewtwo
July 6th, 2005, 05:16 PM
I felt the wind blow through my fur...
the cold of winter holding me back
the gale force pushing onto me
but I must get back on the right track...
I must continue...must pursue...
Dreams that are out of reach...
But Winter's freezing touch is the one thing...
The one thing that holds me back...that leech...
sapping my hopes and intuition...
makes me want to curl up and wither away...
flutter to the harsh winds like dust
but all the wind and cold does is make me sway...
soon the spring shall co9me...
a new hope shall arise from the ashes
revive like the pheonix from the burning embers...
Shine through winter's death grip and give a brilliant shine...

Tomorrow starts a new day...

Natsuki
July 6th, 2005, 09:16 PM
I felt the wind blow through my fur...
the cold of winter holding me back
the gale force pushing onto me
but I must get back on the right track...
I must continue...must pursue...
Dreams that are out of reach...
But Winter's freezing touch is the one thing...
The one thing that holds me back...that leech...
sapping my hopes and intuition...
makes me want to curl up and wither away...
flutter to the harsh winds like dust
but all the wind and cold does is make me sway...
soon the spring shall co9me (come)...
a new hope shall arise from the ashes
revive like the pheonix (phoenix) from the burning embers...
Shine through winter's death grip and give a brilliant shine...

Tomorrow starts a new day...

This certainly was an interesting poem. ^^ The first line makes one think that the "narrator" or the main subject in the poem is some sort of an animal, no? I think this poem shows what one must endure to reach the goals they hope to accomplish. ^^ Nothing goes without saying, and you can't expect to get the things you want to get done without a bit of effort.

I corrected a few of the spelling errors you had, and overall your poem was nicely written. :33

~Kelsey

Cybex Mewtwo
July 7th, 2005, 04:20 AM
I was typing a little fast on my friends keyboard...it has a habit of adding a letter or two for me when I type...but thanks for the comment.