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Cybex Mewtwo
July 9th, 2005, 04:55 PM
I stand by the waters' edge
Waiting for the one thing that I never had...

I stand by the waters' edge
Longing for the one memory that I never knew...

I stand by the waters' edge
Wishing for the return of the person who never loved me...

I still stand by the waters' edge...
hoping that what I want returns from the beyond...

Time passes...
And I am still there...
But I remain empty-handed...

Caroline
July 11th, 2005, 01:58 AM
It's very good. ^_^
I love how you repeated the words, 'I stand by the waters' edge' in most of the lines. It gave it a stronger effect.
You have done a great job with it and I hope to see more work from you in the near future.

Sumomo & Kotoko
July 11th, 2005, 09:09 AM
I loved it. It showed how you can love someone but they don't love you back....its a sad feeling really. :(

But the poem was great! 9/10.

Midori Chi
July 11th, 2005, 02:17 PM
Like anger, it is also very good! ^^ Keep up the good work! 9/10

Cybex Mewtwo
July 11th, 2005, 04:52 PM
Wanna know hat's funny? Most of these I make up on the spot.

Midori Chi
July 11th, 2005, 05:07 PM
I did that with one of mine! So you're not the only one..

Cybex Mewtwo
July 11th, 2005, 05:12 PM
Yep. I pull this stunt all the time.