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<<-_Lord-Krishna_->>
July 15th, 2005, 11:11 AM
This rap is dedicated to my uncle, who was a great man.

I still have nightmares in the night

Sometimes I cannot longer fight

Its a burden I carry to have witnessed your death

I live like in a rain of pain, every drop is a hit

I feel I could have prevented your fall

But I guess it was destinys call

There was nothing I could do

But watch them gangster shoot you

All these years my rage has taken over me

I just hope I can be set free

I only blame myself its like im living a lie

A lie im gonna take with me till the day I die

Every day without my uncle is a fight between wrong and right

Cuz he's no longer there to teach me to stand up when I fall

He's no longer here to tell me to keep tall

Its through my rhymes I express my noexistent crimes

To you I confessed my greatest fears

Now all I have to remember you is my mothers tears

I'll never be like you so why pretend

But I promise that your pride I will defend

Cybex Mewtwo
July 15th, 2005, 11:18 AM
You really need to get these rhymes out on a cd or something. These are deep, meaningful, and I came up with beats in my head while reading them. You have skill, and with more work you could hit the big time.

<<-_Lord-Krishna_->>
July 15th, 2005, 11:20 AM
Thanks alot, actually Im working on a demo, I write the raps but I don't have beats for them.

Cybex Mewtwo
July 15th, 2005, 11:23 AM
Well, if I could, I'd hook you up with some major beats, but I can't sadly. But fear not. Your time will come. One way to try and help is you could try and find instrumental versions of songs and write stuff for them. Just a mere thought.

<<-_Lord-Krishna_->>
July 15th, 2005, 11:25 AM
Yeah thanks a bunch for the advice, Im gonna definitly do that.

Legolas
July 15th, 2005, 02:33 PM
GO DZ! That rap rocked!!!! It was like Eminem's raps, but shorter. I really liked it! I am a big rap fan cause the beat and stuff. So good luck! XD

Caroline
July 16th, 2005, 04:24 AM
I have never been into raps...
But yours is something special. ^_^ I enjoyed it. Keep up with the great work.