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Eliana
August 10th, 2005, 11:07 PM
Well since my Poetry Thread died *again* (XD) I'll just post a song I recently wrote and yes I actually am working on a tune *gasp* XD
She's All Alone
She’s leaving home the last time,
Leaving her problems behind.
No more lies or accusations,
She’s finally found inspiration.
But now she’s all alone…
Chorus
No one’s left to hear her screaming,
She’s trapped inside her world of dreaming,
There’s no where to go, no where to hide,
She’s lost out there and bleeding deep inside…
She’s a rebel of her own kind,
Death and destruction rule her mind.
Sick of all she’s ever known,
Now she’s never coming home.
But it doesn’t matter now,
‘Cause she’s all alone…
Chorus
She’s gone forever, never coming back….
Chorus
~~~~
Hope it isn't too bad XP
~Eli
Thomas-san
August 10th, 2005, 11:21 PM
Awesome song Eli...if this was AllPoetry.com I would give you a million applauses...:)
Eliana
August 10th, 2005, 11:32 PM
XD I'll go post it there if you'd like, no one ever reads my stuff there...XD Thanks!
Lust
August 11th, 2005, 12:48 AM
This is really good, Eli! You should post a voice clip of you singing it.
Eliana
August 11th, 2005, 12:58 AM
Well I only got the chorus...it's REALLY sucky but I'm gonna add the one where I play guitar with it soon...
blue eyes white dragon
August 11th, 2005, 01:02 AM
that is like sweet! you are A very good writer!
~kasey
Eliana
August 11th, 2005, 01:16 AM
Awws, thanks! ^_^ *feels flattered* I didn't think it was so good...XD
Nagoyaka Aikouka
August 11th, 2005, 01:47 AM
You thought wrong! That's awesome! *giggles and pasts back* It really was good, and I enjoyed reading it. *confesses* I'm terribly with rhyme schemes, so I envy how effortlessly yours flows.
EvIL_CAjUN_CHIkIN
August 11th, 2005, 01:53 AM
oh my god, I love it! I love it! It's so FAAAAAAAAAAAAABULOUS!!!!
j/k..
It really is good, you've outdone yourself this time Eli. XD
Great job!
zero-hunter x7
August 11th, 2005, 02:04 AM
nice song, you did a great job, I like it a lot
Camp Kill Yourself
August 11th, 2005, 04:22 AM
I really like it. A lot.
I love the chorus especially, and you have a really awesome voice if that`s you singing in the clip.
Cybex Mewtwo
August 11th, 2005, 11:42 AM
I can't even write 10 lines that rhyme and made decent, yet you write a SONG and oulled it off quite nicely. Excellent work on your part.
Eliana
August 11th, 2005, 11:55 AM
...Yeah that was me....xD;;;; I think my voice sounds terrible in the mic...xD This afternoon I'll post the guitar one...and then maybe I'll get a tune for the stanzas.
Phantom Mew- Thanks so much! Yeah rhyming was never a problem for me, it just always worked...o.o
Pincushion
August 11th, 2005, 12:02 PM
Oh so EMO haha..sorry Eli.
Its nice though =3
Eliana
August 11th, 2005, 12:11 PM
Dang..XD Well as long as the world rebel is in it, I'm fine...thankies! XD