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Sumomo & Kotoko
August 12th, 2005, 08:33 PM
Loss or Gain?

Is this a loss or gain?
No matter what
There will still be pain.

Is this a loss or gain?
Ya'll fought and now
You are left in the rain.

Is this a loss or gain?
Will I ever know
This is such a strain.

Is this a loss or gain?
Its going to hit me
Like a speeding train.

Is this a loss or gain?
I fear the worst
For this is no game.

This is for sure a loss
And a gain

But I what I gain
Isen't worth the loss.

Cybex Mewtwo
August 13th, 2005, 03:25 PM
Not bad! Repeating the same line gives it a bit more meaning, and that little twist at the end really sparked! Excellent.

Midori Chi
August 13th, 2005, 07:13 PM
Very nice! I agree with Cybex! ^^

Sumomo & Kotoko
August 13th, 2005, 08:43 PM
Thank you both. :D
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