Zerro
November 30th, 2005, 03:28 PM
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Prolouge : Where the Kia was born
The ocean waves thrashed to the shore as I walked along it. It was almost time... The lights from the road really had no effect on the beach, if you faced the ocean there was nothing, just water and darkness. As I turned my head to the livelyness of the city, light slowly made it self know again. Two worlds... Two totaly differnt worlds coexisting with each other, yet people are blind to the truth. They have been living in the light so long that perhaps they canot see whats right in front of there faces. My head turned toward the dimed moon over the waters. Maybe I've just walked in the dark to much... I shook my head and let out a sigh. Its almost time... I must'nt forget... I continued my stroll down the beach untill finaly I heard it, a high pitch screech that seemed the whole world could hear, but it was only me. The portal has opened, just like he said. A fog hovered about ten yards off the shore. It was dark, darker than the rest of the ****ed ocean. I took in a deep breath, "It's time." and rushed out towards the Darkness, untill I was devoured by the haze. The haze spew me out in to the other world. It was once a world of hope, glory, power and peace. Now you couldn’t even imagine that this… Filthy, horible place was once the Shining light of the realms. The place where the Kia was born. My body quivered at the thought as I picked myself up and looked around only to see I was alone, in this vast, dark, sandy desert. “There late.” I said to myself letting out a sigh. The winds began to pick up blowing the sand in my face, and causing me to be more alert. Shifting winds were almost always a sign of trouble, and in this place trouble was never far behind any Kiater. My fists tightened as my range of sight grew shorter by the second. The darkness crept forth in pieces as if it were alive. Pitch black creatures hurled out of the darkness, as they did I summoned all my energy into my fists and they burts into a dark blue aura. I raised my arm to there level shooting bits of the aura out at them while they were still in the distance. One by one they fell back into the darkness after being shot, only to return with more forces. “**** IT, where the hell are they.” I knew I couldn’t hold back the Shadows for long, esspeicaly if they keep coming back. The Shadows continued to raid forth untill they were finaly close enough to attack. My fists swong back and forth, but there was just to many. There claws began to dig into my flesh ripping apart my abdominal muscel first, and then simutainusly one gouged my eyes, while the other bit in to my chest. They did’nt want to kill me. No they wanted me to feel every bit of the pain, and so I did. I was beaten beyound reconnishion and only wished to be dead. I felt a slight movement as if one of the shadows raised its claw above my face. Finaly… They were going to finish the job. My journey was over, and all the battles I fought were in vain. One last wimper escaped from my mouth. To think that this was where the Kia was born. The claw came chrashing down on my skull crushing it in, killing me on impact… My life was just one, of many others. They will continue the war. They will fight. And they will ultamately suffer the same fate I did. It’s just the balance of life. Its what happens when you walk in the darkness just a bit to long. Its what happens when you walk… Where the Kia was born.
Prolouge : Where the Kia was born
The ocean waves thrashed to the shore as I walked along it. It was almost time... The lights from the road really had no effect on the beach, if you faced the ocean there was nothing, just water and darkness. As I turned my head to the livelyness of the city, light slowly made it self know again. Two worlds... Two totaly differnt worlds coexisting with each other, yet people are blind to the truth. They have been living in the light so long that perhaps they canot see whats right in front of there faces. My head turned toward the dimed moon over the waters. Maybe I've just walked in the dark to much... I shook my head and let out a sigh. Its almost time... I must'nt forget... I continued my stroll down the beach untill finaly I heard it, a high pitch screech that seemed the whole world could hear, but it was only me. The portal has opened, just like he said. A fog hovered about ten yards off the shore. It was dark, darker than the rest of the ****ed ocean. I took in a deep breath, "It's time." and rushed out towards the Darkness, untill I was devoured by the haze. The haze spew me out in to the other world. It was once a world of hope, glory, power and peace. Now you couldn’t even imagine that this… Filthy, horible place was once the Shining light of the realms. The place where the Kia was born. My body quivered at the thought as I picked myself up and looked around only to see I was alone, in this vast, dark, sandy desert. “There late.” I said to myself letting out a sigh. The winds began to pick up blowing the sand in my face, and causing me to be more alert. Shifting winds were almost always a sign of trouble, and in this place trouble was never far behind any Kiater. My fists tightened as my range of sight grew shorter by the second. The darkness crept forth in pieces as if it were alive. Pitch black creatures hurled out of the darkness, as they did I summoned all my energy into my fists and they burts into a dark blue aura. I raised my arm to there level shooting bits of the aura out at them while they were still in the distance. One by one they fell back into the darkness after being shot, only to return with more forces. “**** IT, where the hell are they.” I knew I couldn’t hold back the Shadows for long, esspeicaly if they keep coming back. The Shadows continued to raid forth untill they were finaly close enough to attack. My fists swong back and forth, but there was just to many. There claws began to dig into my flesh ripping apart my abdominal muscel first, and then simutainusly one gouged my eyes, while the other bit in to my chest. They did’nt want to kill me. No they wanted me to feel every bit of the pain, and so I did. I was beaten beyound reconnishion and only wished to be dead. I felt a slight movement as if one of the shadows raised its claw above my face. Finaly… They were going to finish the job. My journey was over, and all the battles I fought were in vain. One last wimper escaped from my mouth. To think that this was where the Kia was born. The claw came chrashing down on my skull crushing it in, killing me on impact… My life was just one, of many others. They will continue the war. They will fight. And they will ultamately suffer the same fate I did. It’s just the balance of life. Its what happens when you walk in the darkness just a bit to long. Its what happens when you walk… Where the Kia was born.