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Memory
December 8th, 2005, 03:39 PM
Rawr, im sure this is bad XD
I wake Up and my heart is pounding.
the snowbells and the sleighs are sounding.
Santa's butt flies out the door,
my alarm goes off, i fall on the floor.
our Christmas tree is lit up so bright,
Santa's already out at flight.
Shiny red coat, big white beard,
Santa is not feared.
XD its horrible isnt it? rawar i was never a good poet -.- XDDD

~Jenny;)

Dark~Winged_Angel
December 8th, 2005, 07:12 PM
i think that poem is very nice! (but who am i to say... im not much of a poet either XD)

Caroline
December 8th, 2005, 10:17 PM
I think it's pretty cool.
It reminds me of a story I wrote just recently. I like how you made two lines line with each other... rhyming couplets right? ^^; That's what you're writing.
You really can write good poems. Keep up with the great work.

Dark~Winged_Angel
December 9th, 2005, 06:20 AM
HEy thats what i was think ing they were ^^ i like those kinds of poems.

phantom_zangetsu
December 9th, 2005, 11:10 PM
its okay..for a starter. i used to tk of weird words like that lol....but yeah, irs okay, at least your into the holiday spirit.

Memory
December 10th, 2005, 08:54 AM
hey thanks ^^ i thought to guys would say something like "it needs to have a rhythm." or more likely: "that's poetry? i thought it was some caveman trying to complete an english sentence 0.o" (which is really hard, you know XD) anyway, thanks ^^