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code zerro the deluge
December 10th, 2005, 04:34 PM
the mind runs at all times
minsight to the blind
my props people given me mine
turn on te lights they are lime

i tell them that is what i want then i kiss her
i woke up feeling pain
it is a shame

people killeen shotten in an all day
all wait bufee
my girl dances in a sway

i am cryin my granma dien
i thought they was lieng
life is like selling and buying

people throw roses at my feet
my fiends sayin that is week
i tell them this is me
why can't you see
wehn i finnaly relize the curtain closes on me

i take a bow
my friends say wow
you got talent
now go out there you anbition

i all most lost it
then i bought it
this bit is any thing for this

i was braggin
now i am saggin
thinken that was me
all those things i did when i was free

the mind is like a lie
and when you die
you look back
with no memories of your life that is that
and you say that i whack

well tell your family you love um
go and hug um
go and push their buttons somethin
befor it is to late
when the curtain closes in your face

Caroline
December 10th, 2005, 08:00 PM
It's pretty good.
Only thing that needs correcting is some grammar and spelling apart from that it's pretty good.