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^^NICK^^ v.3.0
December 23rd, 2005, 06:48 PM
*I know it's in the wrong section, sorry. Could someone move it, please?*

Slowly, surely

I step onto my porch

Surely I don't move that slowly, usually

But today is especially special to me

Slowly, I make my way

Surely, it'll make my day

Knowing ours will never fray

Love, that is

That is is important to me

Is how you or me

Or us you see

Could never be without it

Slowly, I trudge anxiously

But surely, to the bus stop

My heart drops as I think of you

True and blue

Just like glue

Forever I hope we're together

Surely the bus arrives

Slowly the the bus driver drives

I get on, happily, excitedly

I pay the driver, then I sit

I cannot believe that I'm about to meet up with you again

Our love, like the mayflower making a pilgrimage of devotion

In hopes of new discoveries, fun things to see

But not without hardships along the way

And giving thanks of any given day

Slowly, but surely

I get there, I beware that you be wearing that shirt you told me about

Surely you are

Slowly I breathe, get off the bus, say thanks to the driver, but not making it far

Far without you jumping into me

My arms catch you, midair

I swear, we'll never let go

This grip that you stole, the love of this hold

With that, we have a special flare

Like crushed pineapples in syrupy delicious sweet potatoes on Sunday dinner

Sugary sweet describes our love, it comes from within our

Hearts, and with this we shall never part, til death do us

But from the start, we can hardly see the end

So let's just pretend, for now, that somehow we'll last enternities

Like oceans, fueled by the breeze, flowing beyond what our eyes can see

And these seas, slowly drifting into the horizon

Surely do not have the depth to contain my love for you

Flygon_Zero
December 23rd, 2005, 08:49 PM
Wow....despite it being in the wrong place, It was incredibly good.
"So let's just pretend, for now, that somehow we'll last eternities"
That just hit me like a ton of bricks, and I just realized how much this related to me.
I mean, it was weird, but it was good at the same time.
Truly a good piece of work. Thanks for posting it here ^-^

^^NICK^^ v.3.0
December 24th, 2005, 10:28 PM
Thanks, I'm really glad that you could relate. I wrote it when I was bored in science class one day. Science is where I write my best work.

Sumomo & Kotoko
December 24th, 2005, 10:51 PM
Wow, that was a very good poem. I mean it, very good.
Bra-vo!! *gulf claps*;)

{{Raven's Phoenix/Lust's Veyron}}

RentCavalier
December 25th, 2005, 09:03 PM
Very good, it captures Angst, but doesn't dwell in it.

WidowMaker
December 26th, 2005, 01:31 AM
Wow.. I'm spechless.. That was awesome! Makes me sorta think twice about love. <3

^^NICK^^ v.3.0
December 27th, 2005, 01:43 PM
Thanks, again. I'm glad you all liked it.

Runasutaru
December 27th, 2005, 04:47 PM
This poem is awesome, and that is saying something, since I usually dont pay much attention to them!

But after all, you posted it at just the right point of my life anyways... XP

I hope ya make more poems like this soon, I like this one a lot!