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White_Winter_Wolf
January 7th, 2006, 12:22 PM
It's more like a song then a poem, but I still think its bad.

If I die, will you follow me?
If I fall, will you catch me?
If I cry, will you dry my tears?
Youre my reflection in all mirrors.

If I love, will you love back?
If Im tired, give me a piggyback?
If I hurt, will you comfort my pain?
Youre my reflection in the rain.

Ive learned, mirrors never show
What you want to see
Youre reflection is a puddle
Doesnt show who you want to be
So I have decided
Never to look in those again
Youll be my reflection
Show my heart, not how Im lookin

If I jump, then youll jump with me
If I sing, youll sing harmony
If I ask, Are a cook or a dancer?
Im your reflection, youll answer.

Sumomo & Kotoko
January 7th, 2006, 10:30 PM
I don't see why you say its bad. I liked it alot. You chose the right words to rym, and it all goes together.

Keep it up. ;)

White_Winter_Wolf
January 19th, 2006, 07:17 PM
Thank you!!! That's one of the nicest comments I've ever gotten for poetry. Even my English teacher said it was pretty bad. I got a C for this poem!