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yuuka
January 7th, 2006, 04:48 PM
i am a dragon
a killer
a murderer

i am a dragon of lonleyness
a dragon of doudt

i use to live
i use to walk the earth
but now my spirite wonders the world

the dragon i am
a dragon of doudt

a killer
a murderer
the dragon i am

Lady Akita
January 25th, 2006, 10:08 PM
Tish, I think somone deserved to comment on this.
A bit short and kinda repetitive. And um..the mechanical errors. ><; Capitals would be helpful, really.
No offence meant, but I really just saw a brief, non-descriptive dragon in my head as I was reading it. So maybe a bit more description. It dosen't take that long to write a few more lines. Plan it out first, if you arn't very good writing on the top of your head.