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code zerro the deluge
January 19th, 2006, 03:55 PM
here i go.
who thought i was gone.
to bad for yaw I got a brand new song.
next thing you now my girl pull out the thong.
sorry kids i am crazy and full of it.
can't tell him nothin
he already gone.
for a wipping i am just to strong.

here i go.
don't mess with me.
don't play with thee.
I am not like Micheal I don't play i don't go hehe. play I don't go hehe.
don't ever test me.

Who be the king of the town.
yaw now i desevere it now give me the crown.
my girl always tell me to chill and lie around.
your right but first let me make this sound.
it goes 12345.
wraped like little kids around there mom's thighs.
to bad for yaw I know yaw cry.
that is why i am back Like Law in the Sky.
You need to chill son.
bring it right back.
dood brock his neck doing back flips on a mat.
to bad piss ***.

here i go.
don't mess with me.
don't play with thee.
I am not like Micheal I don't play i don't go hehe. play I don't go hehe.
don't ever test me.

My thing is to good you know that it is on.
i am rich get papers my money is long.
kids ring bells when i come though like ding ding dong.
sray on the cassel like oooo ching-chong.
are you sad,mad.
don't be get glad.
Becouse this song is so fat.
Produced By my home boy named Meek-Meek.
Though he prefers meek the freak.

here i go.
don't mess with me.
don't play with thee.
I am not like Micheal I don't play i don't go hehe. play I don't go hehe.
don't ever test me.

well tell me what you thought?

pokejungle
January 19th, 2006, 04:05 PM
o.o;

I think you need to wait a few more years before attempting rap again.

code zerro the deluge
January 19th, 2006, 04:08 PM
why do you say that.
at least rate it 1-10

pokejungle
January 19th, 2006, 04:10 PM
Because ._."

2/10~ puuuuu

code zerro the deluge
January 19th, 2006, 04:11 PM
if you can do better wanna have a contest.

pokejungle
January 19th, 2006, 04:15 PM
Ummm no <<; I don't write rap.

Because rap by definition is killing its own genre and is not to be respected D: Sorry~

Zerro
January 19th, 2006, 04:33 PM
Lol, thank you Katsuro, someone had to say it.

Lily
January 19th, 2006, 04:38 PM
Who knows - the term 'respect' has changed significantly over the prior years.

I'm not an expert on rap, nor am I a fan of it, but yours is..well, interesting, to say the least. It wasn't bad - I thought it followed a certain beat, and it sure sounded like a rap. o_O; I don't do number reviews, because they explain absolutely nothing, y'know?

Anyway, good job. I don't think it's fair for me to judge whether or not it's good or not, due to my lack of experience.

pokejungle
January 19th, 2006, 04:40 PM
Who knows - the term 'respect' has changed significantly over the prior years.

I'm not an expert on rap, nor am I a fan of it, but yours is..well, interesting, to say the least. It wasn't bad - I thought it followed a certain beat, and it sure sounded like a rap. o_O; I don't do number reviews, because they explain absolutely nothing, y'know?

Anyway, good job. I don't think it's fair for me to judge whether or not it's good or not, due to my lack of experience.
No, I think the meaning of 'respect' has remained the same.

Sometimes being honest is the best critism, and helps an author the most.

code zerro the deluge
January 19th, 2006, 04:41 PM
a lot of African and whites did and enjoyed rap.
now i emit i do not like all rap.
like the ones were they abuse the girls and crap like that.
but rap is a great thiong to listen to.
a lot of people wouldn't be who they are today with out it.
Eminem,2pac,Notorius BIG.etc. Oh and rap will amount to a lot more than you,you parents,your face,and your music.
only a gay person would say rap sucks when rappers get payed more than your parents and cd's sell more than any thing else in the world except for r7b it is tie.
so shut your mouth up. and don't be gay.
and more than 50% of the world like rap you sack ***. so get your facts strait and then talk.

and can we stay on topic.

pokejungle
January 19th, 2006, 04:45 PM
a lot of African and whites did and enjoyed rap.
now i emit i do not like all rap.
like the ones were they abuse the girls and crap like that.
but rap is a great thiong to listen to.
a lot of people wouldn't be who they are today with out it.
Eminem,2pac,Notorius BIG.etc. Oh and rap will amount to a lot more than you,you parents,your face,and your music.
only a gay person would say rap sucks when rappers get payed more than your parents and cd's sell more than any thing else in the world except for r7b it is tie.
so shut your mouth up. and don't be gay.

and can we stay on topic.
Sexual orientation slurs~ naughty naughty.

Ok, I'm sorry. So why are you writing rap when you admit that you don't like it~?

code zerro the deluge
January 19th, 2006, 04:48 PM
the ones were they abuse girls and curse a lot i do not like that kind.
Who was a Sexual orientation slurs

Lily
January 19th, 2006, 04:49 PM
..But my point is you didn't exactly justify the comment you made ^^ Honesty is one thing - but one that offends the author without reason is another.

code zerro the deluge
January 19th, 2006, 04:51 PM
umm who are you talking to?

pokejungle
January 19th, 2006, 05:00 PM
..But my point is you didn't exactly justify the comment you made ^^ Honesty is one thing - but one that offends the author without reason is another.
Ok, I guess I'll further justify my ratings and comments.

1) There's very little grammar

2) Spelling mistakes occur waaaay too often.

I am not like Micheal when I play I don't go hehe.

...that disturbed me. Not to mention that it didn't fit very well.

The lines felt more like they were molded around the rhyming aspect instead of the message they were trying to convey.

code zerro the deluge
January 19th, 2006, 05:08 PM
it tecknecly i do not know how to spell that word.
it wasn't a rap pursay it was a freestyle really.

it wasn't going to be spelled right.