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pink-tiger
January 20th, 2006, 07:41 PM
This is were i'll keep all my poems.....hope u like them so much..its who I am an what I feel...

Moonlight

At night you see everything.....my shame, my hate....my heart...
You who watches me every day at night...You're my moonlight..
You're the light that comes from the moon to guide me....you who
shine's on me on cold windy nights...You who I tell everything when you're there.....
You're my moonlight....The one who listens. The one who understands....
There's no other like you.......
You're up there day and night....But you are my moonlight....
My one and only moonlight............................Moonlight........

Midori Chi
January 20th, 2006, 07:45 PM
Few grammar errors, but the poetry itself is very good. ^^ I like the flow to this. The "....." show some good emotional pauses. Could you make your next one longer though? Your poems are good, so don't make 'em so short.

*4.8 out of 5.0*

pink-tiger
January 20th, 2006, 08:06 PM
Few grammar errors, but the poetry itself is very good. ^^ I like the flow to this. The "....." show some good emotional pauses. Could you make your next one longer though? Your poems are good, so don't make 'em so short.

*4.8 out of 5.0*

Yes!!!
I will do..I just wanted 2 see if they were good to be posted on poetry section....thanks Midori i'll work on the next 1!!!

pink-tiger
February 4th, 2006, 02:07 PM
Heres another poem......


Meaning of Life

As I open the dood, I realize that the meaning of life passes before my
eyes.. I then remembered what life's about...

Life's a gift given to each of us, only we can choose how to live it...
Life's something to appreciate, something not to waste.

I now see the meaning of life through my eyes. And now I know how I lived.
And I have to admit that as my life passes before my eyes, I've figured out that I have wasted life, but I also know I've used life to its limits.

And although I do regret the times I wasted precious life, I have to admit that even if I spent life as well.........

I'm glad of the life I have, and the life I lived. Im proud of who I was, and who I am.

I know life's important, but there's one thing I love the most. And it's something life give's to us. And it's a family, that loves and cares for us.

Life may be different for each of us, but there's one thing we all think the same. I dont think anyone could not care, because I'm sure we all appreciate. And it's the life we have and get. Because without it, we would'nt be were we are today...

So if you have wasted life, don't worry.. ANd long as you know, you can start living it well....Just remember the meaning of life...

Midori Chi
February 5th, 2006, 09:16 AM
This is another good one. Keep up the good work.

pink-tiger
February 5th, 2006, 03:43 PM
okay!!I'll do so.I think I have 3 other poems to post.

purple,-sweetflower
February 11th, 2006, 06:59 AM
Its realy good!!Inspires me a lot sis!!
And it makes people realize what lifes all about!!
This seems like it goes to everyone on pc.Cause it talks 2 everyone about the meaning of life!!clapp clapp!!! Good job sis!!

pink-tiger
February 12th, 2006, 07:00 AM
Its realy good!!Inspires me a lot sis!!
And it makes people realize what lifes all about!!
This seems like it goes to everyone on pc.Cause it talks 2 everyone about the meaning of life!!clapp clapp!!! Good job sis!!

Yey!!!!I did good!!!!
Thanks sis!!

Midori Chi
February 12th, 2006, 06:00 PM
Yup. I can't wait for your next one. ^^

pink-tiger
March 16th, 2006, 06:19 AM
Here's my next poem:

"My Love"

My friend, I see you everyday
and I must tell you some day...

You may not know, but I can truly
say...I love you...I know it's hard
to accept...Sorry my friend.

Time passes and I haven't said
a thing. When you wrote to me,
I blushed all day.

When I read what you wrote,
my heart grew with happiness
...And then I can truly say,"My love."

As time passes by, we have a great
time, and I'm happy to say,"My love."

I seems like it's been years, but
truly it's been three days. But already
my love, I'm happier than ever
before....Thanks to you,"My love."

Together forever I wish to be. My love,
I'm always with you..

Difficulties will occur,
I'm sure. But if you love me like I love you...our love will
succeed...I love you..."My love."

purple,-sweetflower
March 16th, 2006, 11:24 AM
really good poem sissy..ur getting better than before.Keep up the good job.

Midori Chi
March 16th, 2006, 11:49 AM
Wow..I'm glad your poems are getting longer. ^^

purple,-sweetflower is right. You're definetely improving..XD

Keep it up, kay?

pink-tiger
March 16th, 2006, 12:37 PM
I dont have 2 listen 2 u..But okay!!^^
I'll do it 4 u..although I dont have 2.
And thanks big sis. Thanks Midori!!!

code zerro the deluge
March 16th, 2006, 03:19 PM
I like it a lot. very cool.

OOC: wow sisters in like real life. PT you never told me. ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!

pink-tiger
March 17th, 2006, 06:37 AM
~ Feelings of Love ~


I must tell you someday my friend
That I have feelings for you
I know it could change our friendship
But I must tell you


Its been a week since that day
And you havent said a think
I dont dare look at you at all, because I know i'll blush
Im scared of what you'll say my friend


Its been again another week
And you finally looked at me
You send me a letter with works i'll carry in my heart and mind
I was happy that day my friend
Because my feelingds for you have reached you


Its been a while since that day you gave me that letter
And im happy ever since
My heart bumps when seeing you in the halls

We walk together knowing we are together
And knowing you love me as well
And I know my feelings of love have been responded by you

My feelings for you are really deep
And I know your are too
Together my friend we'll be
And we'll soar together forever

Umm I cant find the original 1 so..its a little sort..So when I find it i'll post it..is it okay?

purple,-sweetflower
March 17th, 2006, 07:11 AM
We'll wait till u wind it.I'll even help u look 4 it when I go over this weekend.

pink-tiger
March 17th, 2006, 07:12 PM
Thank's but I dont think i'll find it so i'll just make another poem.
Next time I post I'll have another poem.

.: Kira Yamato :.
March 17th, 2006, 11:42 PM
Pink-chan, I love your poems, just as I said about Purple's poems, yours touch me as well...Keep up the great work ^-^, your last 2 poems remind me of my gf and how our relationship started and what she told me ^^ I am looking forward to the next poems. also if you want to be friends lease PM me if you like. ^^

purple,-sweetflower
March 18th, 2006, 07:04 AM
Wow sis...Your making new friends, and its sad u cant find the poem..sorry I could'nt go over to help u find it....

phantom_zangetsu
March 20th, 2006, 04:07 AM
you are a very good poet. much of it sounds a bit like my old mentor, (just kidding) edgar allan poe. some are deeply very sad and that's how i liked it! very nice!!! 98/100!!! mayb i should make a poetry thread myslef?

pink-tiger
March 24th, 2006, 02:49 PM
you are a very good poet. much of it sounds a bit like my old mentor, (just kidding) edgar allan poe. some are deeply very sad and that's how i liked it! very nice!!! 98/100!!! mayb i should make a poetry thread myslef?

Thanks I know maybe I double posted...
But I just want 2 say that I found my original poem!!!^^
Next time I'll have it!!!
Thanks death bringer!!!

phantom_zangetsu
March 25th, 2006, 03:55 AM
umm...your welcome!!! im glad i made someone happy

code zerro the deluge
March 25th, 2006, 06:20 AM
well let's here it. putt it up.

pink-tiger
April 1st, 2006, 08:53 AM
♥ My feelings for you ♥


I see you in the hall
I wonder if you notice me..
Can't you see in me what I feel?

Please look into my eyes and tell me what you see..
Look inside of me
Look in my heart you'll find a glittered place,
Where you are kept inside

Look at my eyes
You'll see my tears
What I feel for you is not a temporarely crush..

My tears are fears of what you'll sat..
But I know I must accept the truth..

When the time comes to know the truth
I'll be ready
Although you may not love me
My tears will fall
My heart shall shine
To know at leat you'll stand by
And shine with me

But when I find out the truth..
And find out you love me
We'll stand together
Ans be together..
With golden tears flowing down my eyes...
And my heart shall shine like the morning sun..

In time i'll find out the truth of my one true love.....

Sorry if theres mistakes on spelling..><

purple,-sweetflower
April 1st, 2006, 09:05 AM
I like it..its really good.and im not sure about the splelling cant help you there!!Sissy!!
But I give it a 10!!

pink-tiger
April 1st, 2006, 03:51 PM
Yey!!A 10!! Me really happy!! And I like your poems 2 sissy..their really good as well.thanks siss!^^

phantom_zangetsu
April 1st, 2006, 05:26 PM
OMG!!! i think im inlove again! that poeam really lifted me...although yeah about those spellings.........whew! that poem really rocks! makes me want to fall inlove again....lol!!!
well i give it a 100/100 ive never really given anyone almost this grade! whew keep it up! *claps hands*

pink-tiger
April 1st, 2006, 06:36 PM
Yey!!I did good on this poem..I did this because it really reminds me of someone I like!!^^
But now im not sure I do anymore..but oh, well!!
I was really happy with the scores u guys gave me thank u both..I guess I should start making more poems^^ Thanks again!!Death_Bringer, sissy!!

phantom_zangetsu
April 2nd, 2006, 07:26 AM
yeah, you really did good! hoping fore more romantic poems *drools* i just love these kind of things!!

pink-tiger
April 2nd, 2006, 08:23 AM
oaky!!You really love romance...^^

Midori Chi
April 2nd, 2006, 10:45 AM
*claps*

Yay! ^^ Wonderful work! Keep it up!

There are a few typos, but the actual grammar itself is just fine. ^__^

pink-tiger
April 2nd, 2006, 05:24 PM
Yey spellings no problem...
Thanks..I ran out of poems in store..but I have to make more so when I post one i'll have the next ready 2 go..But right now im out..><
But thanks again^^

Midori Chi
April 6th, 2006, 03:47 PM
Okay. I'll be watin' for your next one. ^^

pink-tiger
April 11th, 2006, 05:11 PM
Here's my next

> Hello <

Hello
Is what I want to say to you today
But as you come right beside me
I freeze all the way

Hello
Is what my heart wants to say
But although I want to say it
I lock them away
Im scared to talk to you
For the fear of your rejection is strong

Hello
Is what I mean to say
When you look at me
But all I do is mummble

Hello
Is what I fear to say
Although my friends want me to say it
I dare not say it to you
Because my fear is not of you
But of what you'll say.....

Hello
Is what say to everyone
But to you I just cant say...
The word hello for you is sacread......
And i'll sound different when I say it to you..

Hello
I'll deside to say to you someday
But I know it wont be soon
For my feelings for you are huge..

Hello
I cry each night
Because I know I should have said it.
You and me are friends
But I cant believe I cant say hello..

Hello
I've desided to say to you tomorrow
After crying at night i've desided
That saying hello to you
Can bring me happiness
Although it may bring me sadness as well..
But the truth I should have known...
That your my friend
And who knows you may love me as well.....

Sorry if grammar mistakes and misspelled words..

purple,-sweetflower
April 11th, 2006, 05:24 PM
really good..siss.I dont know if theres mistakes..im not good at telling....
But I give it a 10/10

pink-tiger
April 12th, 2006, 04:13 PM
Yey!! Well we have to wait for other people to tell me if its okay on grammar and spelling..^^

Kalylia
April 13th, 2006, 02:54 PM
"You and I are friends"

"mumble"

Those are the two I caught, but other than that, it was a nice poem. I think it would be stronger with a few different word choices. Remember, you don't get very many in a poem (unless you're me, who can ramble on and on in a stanza... I just never seem to know when to stop...), so make everyone count! Use words that taste good on your tongue and sound good when you read it aloud. As silly as you might look, reading your poetry out loud to yourself can reveal a lot of things- like rhythm error, rhyme error, and just general areas lacking.

It was a good poem, though! Keep up the good work!

Midori Chi
April 13th, 2006, 04:12 PM
It's another good one, pinky. XD

You have a few typos. (but hey, we all make typos TT)

I liked how "Hello" starts off each verse. It's very nice. Keep it coming. XD

pink-tiger
April 13th, 2006, 05:44 PM
hehehe....Im waiting 4 my brother and my pair..to come and see..they always do..TT

fallen_angel
April 13th, 2006, 05:54 PM
Good poems like always pink-tiger!

phantom_zangetsu
April 13th, 2006, 05:55 PM
hmm....okay now ive posted on your poem lil' sis! LOL! that's a nice poem...i mean, it kind of reminded me of someone...heh, nevermind...good one! and keep it up!

pink-tiger
April 13th, 2006, 05:55 PM
thanks.. I im happy your the one who come here!!!!I mean you and sister in law...

Midori Chi
April 13th, 2006, 06:15 PM
Am I your sister-in-law? X0

pink-tiger
April 14th, 2006, 05:14 AM
ummmmm no....
My next poem i've done..but I just have to profread it then post it.

code zerro the deluge
April 14th, 2006, 05:20 AM
Wow you are really getting good. Better than my poems.

pink-tiger
April 14th, 2006, 05:38 AM
Wow you are really getting good. Better than my poems.

im not sure..the one you wrote about love..I really like it..its so sweet..^^

pink-tiger
April 21st, 2006, 04:13 PM
♥ When You Came Into My Life ♥

When you cane into my life
Everything around me was the same
But when your around you made it change

When you came into my life
You were my very best friend
At that time I did not know why you were different
Because at that time you were just my friend

When you came into my life
You were always there for me
When I was happy
And when I was in pain....

When you came into my life
I was never bored because you were there
You always kept me company when I was alone

When you came into my life
Everyday I liked you more
More that it past the loving you as a brother
And I became happy, I dont know why
It was a strange feeling, but I liked it..

When you came into my life
We became happy..
I loved it..
And im sure you did to...

When you came into my life
I was happy to see you smile at me
Im glad to know that after all this time
You still smiled at me happily

When you came into my life
And time passed by quickly
As time passed by I did not notice..
That we've become even closer..to each other..

When you came into my life
I was happy to finally be with you..
So together we'll be for a while...
And hopping our love will last forever........



This I did for my pair...code zerro the deluge..
Sorry if theres spelling errors^^

phantom_zangetsu
April 22nd, 2006, 05:41 AM
*claps proudly* another one of your good works! this time...im really wondering...
how do you get the emotions so...flowy and...well....lovely?

anyways...good job. hey! im the first one to comment! waddya know? ^___^

pink-tiger
April 22nd, 2006, 06:30 AM
*claps proudly* another one of your good works! this time...im really wondering...
how do you get the emotions so...flowy and...well....lovely?

anyways...good job. hey! im the first one to comment! waddya know? ^___^

umm thanks, umm you know I have no idea how I get it..I guess I just start writing and I dont even realize what I write..but at the end..I read it and its really nice..I guess I just write what I feel....

Midori Chi
April 22nd, 2006, 07:31 AM
*smiles*
This is one of my favorites of yours.
I just LOVE it!
I love everything about it.

Keep up da good work, pinky! XD

code zerro the deluge
April 23rd, 2006, 11:57 AM
thanx pink-tiger I love it.

pink-tiger
April 23rd, 2006, 05:54 PM
hehehe..thanks..I have more..but im not surw when i'll post them..

phantom_zangetsu
April 24th, 2006, 06:32 PM
hmm...i guess your right oh well...a very good poem once again! hehe!

lateforwork
April 25th, 2006, 07:06 AM
That was really good! I am very impressed and will probably wind up thinking about it a lot today.

Emma
April 25th, 2006, 08:31 AM
I like your poems ^^; I'm not really a type for poems but I still think those ones are really good :D

pink-tiger
April 26th, 2006, 02:39 PM
thanks people..and welcome lateforwork, and devastation...

pink-tiger
May 8th, 2006, 06:30 PM
thanks people..and welcome lateforwork, and devastation...


~ Best Friend ~

You who's always there by myside
You who I talk and share my secrets with
You and I who are like siters
You, you my best friend...

The person who I call everyday
The one I turn to when I need help
The one who plays with me when im bored
The person you are is my best friend

My partner for everything I do
My company when I make a sleepover
My partner, my sister..your my best friend

Although you may not be my sister
I love you just like one
Your the one I talk to when im down
I just want to say something to you my friend
Im happy to have you as a friend
Your the best friend i've ever had
Thank you for sticking by my side...

Thanks for being my siter
Thanks for watching over me
Thanks for caring for me as well
Thanks for being my best friend...

For you i'll do anything
For you I will soar
For you my friend i'll do anything
For youits all worth it..

The future looks bright for us
The present as well
The love of friendship so srtong
The meaning must be, we can go though anything

You and I go far
Our friendship shall last forever
For I dont think we shall let go
We will forever hold on to our friendship...
Since after all we are best friends...

I hope thers no misspelling or grammer things..

code zerro the deluge
May 9th, 2006, 03:22 AM
it like it pink. it is great.

pink-tiger
May 9th, 2006, 04:55 AM
thanks!!^^ ur the first one..yey!!!

ThEoNeAnDoNlY555
May 9th, 2006, 03:17 PM
i really like your work. i just took the time to read all of your poetry. it was all very good. i like your style very much. your most recent one is the only one i will comment on though.

there were a few spelling errors. hehe. you seem to have uber trouble with that. one complaint i have is your word choice. it all seems to flow. but with your word choice i think you could make a stronger impact. using larger and most complexe words to fill your space would make your poems overall quality much better.

but as i said. your poetry is amazing.

pink-tiger
May 9th, 2006, 06:08 PM
hehehe TT
thank you!!^^ I need all the advise I could get from people.and thanks for coming sir.!!!!

Vash2000
May 9th, 2006, 06:10 PM
Very nice poem, I like it

pink-tiger
May 9th, 2006, 06:13 PM
thanks!!! vash2000 and thanks for coming to my poetry thread.....^^

~Blue_Melody~
May 13th, 2006, 05:51 AM
hi sister!! your poems are extremely good..

pink-tiger
May 13th, 2006, 05:55 AM
thanks!! Im happy you found this and joind..

~Blue_Melody~
May 15th, 2006, 06:50 PM
Thanks I hope you make more poems. I'll wait for them..
Because I have nothing else to do.

phantom_zangetsu
May 16th, 2006, 09:23 PM
whoa...orry for not posting so long........lil sis! haha!
anyways.that "best friend" poem was good...yup....lovely emotions....kinda cheerful though...i think its more of a loved-one than a bestfriend? haha! j/k...good job sis! keep it up!

pink-tiger
May 21st, 2006, 06:08 AM
heheheTT
thanks though^^

pink-tiger
May 25th, 2006, 02:55 PM
♥Sweet Love♥

As spring comes
Love arrives to our lives
Your true love is discover

As spring goes by
Our love stays
Our sweet love remains

When the birds sing of joy
Our hearts sing of happiness as well
Our love is strong,our love is pure

The sweetness of love is nice
Its a wonderfull feeling
The feeling of sweet love is special

As cupid goes by and shoots his arrows
Im shot with love
A love that lasts forever

Sweet love's like a perfume
One that never fades
And one that never wastes..

And as love fills my soul
I feel like a butterfly wondering by
Watching the wonderfull flowers below

As look down I see you there..smiling at me and my hearts fills with happyness
And it feels like jumping out
And I became happy to see you smiling at me

And I thank cupid for shooting us
For I know you love me as well
Im happy we're together

For this sweet love we feel is eternal
And im happy its so..
I know that I would have wanted to be with you forever..for our sweet love is forever..

code zerro the deluge
May 25th, 2006, 03:24 PM
I love it p-t. it is nice.

pink-tiger
May 25th, 2006, 04:32 PM
thank you!!
umm I..never mine.

purple,-sweetflower
May 27th, 2006, 02:13 PM
Yet again another super poem sister.. you always attack again with love....

pink-tiger
May 28th, 2006, 10:00 AM
Thanks.And its because I just like love poetry. It remineds you of things..

phantom_zangetsu
May 28th, 2006, 07:27 PM
aww...tsk...that poem brings back the old days....XD!
it has a bit of an error i saw, but still okay wonderful i guess....haha!
keep it up! lil sis!

pink-tiger
May 28th, 2006, 07:52 PM
aww...tsk...that poem brings back the old days....XD!
it has a bit of an error i saw, but still okay wonderful i guess....haha!
keep it up! lil sis!

I would not be surprise if there was an error..I didnt prof read it before I posted it.><
Thanks for coming though brother.^^

But my next one im not sure what it will be about.

purple,-sweetflower
May 30th, 2006, 04:15 PM
Oh, well whatever the poem is about. Im sure it will be good.

pink-tiger
June 11th, 2006, 06:09 AM
Its been a while...hehe

*Go Away*

I dont want to look at you no more
But I do have something to say
Go away
Leave me alone..

You've hurt me enough
Whta else do you want?
Go with her
Thats what you did before
Go away

I dont want to look at you no more
But I do have something to say
Go away
Leave me alone...

You've been with me and her as well
I cant believe you did this to me
I who loves you so much
I thought you loved me to
I guess I was wrong

I dont want to look at you no more
But I do have something to say
Go away
Leave me alone...

Why do you follow me?
Does seeing my tears fall not enough?
I hate you with all my might
You see me fall apart, and it truely hurts...

I dont want to look at you no more
So please
Go away...

I had this idea from this song I have in my cell phone..this is for no one so please dont think I made it for someone......hope you guys like it!!

purple,-sweetflower
June 15th, 2006, 06:59 AM
Well its really good. I give it a 10
Its that good.But im not sure about errors.

pink-tiger
June 15th, 2006, 07:03 AM
Thank you sissy!!I know I just posted the one above but heres another one.

I love u

I know you know this
But I cant stop saying it to myself
So now i'll say it to you and then repeat it
I love u

Were ment to be together
And I know you this to...
I want you byside, I dont want you to go..
Please hold me tight and never let go
I love u

I know you know this
But I cant stop saying it to myself
So now i'll say it to you and then repeat it
I love u

I'll fly with you in the sky...
I'll look at you smiling at me
Hold my hand
We'll soar together
Always together

I know you know this
But I cant stop saying it to myself
So now i'll say it to you and then repeat it
I love u

I love u I love U I love u
Its all I can say its all I can think
I know we'll be together together forever..
I love you...never forget it..

This is for the one just for me..

~Ozy~
June 15th, 2006, 10:41 AM
What went wrong: Proofread it. Proofread, edit, fix typos, revise it for grammar and punctuation. It makes life SO much easier on your readers.

I also generally disagree with a repeating stanze, excepting songs. It tends to lose meaning after the first two repititions. It's something to consider, at the least.

Word choice as well, be a little more creative then generic terms to express love and devotion. There's not much here to interest a reader and after a while, it becomes very bland. Tying in with this slightly, use stronger imagery and metaphor. It engages the mind more than direct statements. I cannot stress that point enough. It helps avoid such direct bluntness that it loses its emotional impact upon the reader.

What went right: The emotion is heartfelt, at least, and there is value to be found in that.

How to make it better: Run it through Word for basic revisions. Work on others yourself. Tighten up the language through multiple and carefully considered edits. Definately work on utilizing poetic devices to make the poem less blunt. Finally, eliminate two of the three repeating stanzas.

Overall score: 4/10

pink-tiger
June 15th, 2006, 02:58 PM
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okay? Thanks for telling me..
I know about the Proofreading..Midori I need you to start checking them again..

purple,-sweetflower
June 20th, 2006, 06:42 PM
Their good.But the first was sad.But the second nice sister.

phantom_zangetsu
June 21st, 2006, 02:23 AM
hmm....cant say much sis......but what am i saying? heck!? course that one is kind of good.....kind of.....some erros i found but yeah that was okay-dokey! XD......

pink-tiger
June 21st, 2006, 05:20 AM
Umm thaks brother.I really have to get Midori to check them im not super good with spelling or grammer!><

ArKiVe
June 21st, 2006, 08:53 PM
Your poems are alright, I liked the one in your first post.

purple,-sweetflower
June 23rd, 2006, 11:49 AM
Umm you mean the first she ever posted in here?Umm yeah that one was good as well..

pink-tiger
June 25th, 2006, 03:55 PM
Umm thank you.Im almost done with my 3 other ones.But i'll only put one of them.^^
I made this poem....................

.::I wonder why::.

I wonder why
My life is the way it is?
And why I have a big smile when inside I know I'm sad?
I wonder why I reflect my life threw the dusty mirror?...

I wonder why
I keep all the bad memories close and good ones away?
Could it be that I wish to be sad inside my body?
I truly wonder why....

I wonder why
After all this time that has passed, I feel much more sad today than what I did before?
And today I find myself walking in the rain when I feel like tears will fall down my face..
And I think back if I didn't do it before when I had everything, why do I do it now?
Now when nothing has changed?

I wonder why
I have people around me who care for me, but I push them away?
Why do I push them away is what I ask myself every time I see them...

I wonder why
I feel sad but at the same time happy?
Could it be cause I'm happy because this was all a dream?
And that I'm sad cause one thing was truly a fact?

I wonder why....
Is everything I've been thinking of.
But now I know that everything I wonder is for a reason.
I'm sad because of things I could have done to improve my life..But I just let them slip away
But I'm happy because this was all a dream that reflected my problems....

I wonder why
I took so long to figure this out?
I guess the good thing is that at least I realized it at some point.

Midori Chi
July 23rd, 2006, 09:14 AM
Ooooh, very nice. I think you've improved quite a bit. ^^

Pheles
July 23rd, 2006, 09:16 AM
I like your last one. Unlike many I've read, it isn't exactly happy, but an interesting feeling of mystery and perhaps sadness. Well done. 0_0

pink-tiger
July 24th, 2006, 05:20 AM
Thanks sister midori and dark-tiger
Well my next im not sure I have so many.

fallen_angel
July 24th, 2006, 07:58 AM
There's not much rhythm in it and a definite pattern but its still very good. ^_^ Good Job.

pink-tiger
July 27th, 2006, 11:27 AM
Well poems dont always have to rhyme.You really should know that, a lot of people wont stop telling me that.^^

.: Kira Yamato :.
July 27th, 2006, 12:43 PM
your poems, grammer problems, or not....they are very god

fallen_angel
July 27th, 2006, 03:54 PM
Well poems dont always have to rhyme.You really should know that, a lot of people wont stop telling me that.^^
I'm sorry alot of people tell you that but there's a difference between RHYTHM and RHYME. Oh and I DO know that poems don't have to rhyme.

RYHTHM- [noun] sound pattern created by stressed and unstressed syllables ; a regular beat

RHYME- [noun] the repetition of sound in two or more phrases

~Blue_Melody~
July 28th, 2006, 08:30 AM
Umm I think she know the difference already....but your realy good sister.