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Memory
January 22nd, 2006, 06:26 PM
Yesh, i am Not the best at poetry..but...

The Green waves of the ocean,
Sparkle through the night.
The moonlight in the pitch black sky
Makes it shine so bright.
You walk along the beach,
Everything is out of reach.
A tear falls from your eyes
Darker than the skies.


I guess that's it ><;;
Hope you like it... ^^; Might add another Poem or two later ^^;;

Lady Akita
January 25th, 2006, 04:18 PM
You're a real, awesome poet. You make your poems short and to the point. But to does in no way lack detail or content. Great job.

Memory
January 27th, 2006, 05:05 PM
Aww thanks ^^; *Hugs* I'm always inproving, someway, some how xP

Zelos
January 27th, 2006, 05:34 PM
Really good ^.^ I have only one problem though, the rhyme scheme sort of changes in the middle. first, you rhyme the second and fourth lines, and then you rhyme the fifth and sixth lines, and then the seventh and eight lines. Just something that I noticed while reading it =D

Once again, I like it ^^;

Memory
January 27th, 2006, 05:36 PM
That's my style xP
I rhyme... weirdly ^^;
Thanks anyway, i dont think i'm THAT GOOD ^^;

Zelos
January 27th, 2006, 05:50 PM
Oh, I see. I haven't seen much of your poetry, so I really haven't gotten an idea of your style and such.(Pretty much all I've seen is this, Christmas Day, and those couplets you used to do on MSN)

And yeah, I think you're good. I'm not gonna lie and say "OMG YOU"RE SUPER MEGA AWESOME PWNSTER!!", because that would be silly and I think you would be able to tell I was lying ^^;;;

'Though I do think you're good =D

(Okay, I'll stop talking >.>;;;)

Memory
January 27th, 2006, 06:10 PM
BOW DOWN TO MY AWESOMENESS! Because i DO PWN! ^^;
Yeah, I can make up poems really fast. ^^; The couplets on MSN? YOu still remember those?!?!?!!? ^^;

Zelos
January 27th, 2006, 06:43 PM
Yesh, I remember them...

Okay, this is sort of getting off-topic...><;;;

Anyway....*Speechless*