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oni flygon
January 25th, 2006, 10:11 PM
Welcome to my poetry thread. I just update very rarely but I try my best when it comes to writing. These are one of my older pieces... I often try to reconstruct them but otherwise, I just leave them as they are... hope you enjoy these... repost for a while until I get that inspiration to write some nice ones.

This is like a sketchbook. Except that it's a poetry thread. Well, I try to focus on one certain subject and usually turn it into poetry or just ramble and rant in poetry. These aren't really my final pieces, but I do love to share them to everyone. So, please enjoy!

Winds And Her Smile
As I stood atop a hill
I felt the wind blow through my hair
It made me think of her
And of things my heart couldn’t bear

The wind reminded me of her smile
A simple thing made in many ways
So beautiful and so innocent
It’s the thing that made my days

The time I remember with her
Was the time when she sat next to me
With her long flowing hair untied
She was like a bird, oh so free

She’s different than any other girl
Her smile is so pure and so soothing
So gentle and so serene
So nave and so heart warming

What I want to see in this world
Is to once more see that smile
It makes my heart soar
And living life worthwhile

Winds and her smile
Oh so simple things in this Earth
They’ve been there together
Ever since their birth

They are the things that I love
Within my whole entire life
The free winds and her gentle smile
They make my mind with less strife

written: 1/17/05
One of the very first poems I've written last year. Quite simple but oddly enough, I got the idea of writing it while watching "Shaun of the Dead". Don't ask why but oh well. Psst, I think it's also because I was also in the brink of breakdown...>>



Like the sky above
Holding the glorious sun,
I hold my heart up to her

Like the river that flows
Gushing forth to the sea,
I rush to give her a kiss

Like the vast blue ocean
That continues to flow
I continue to love her…

Quite simple if you ask me. This was just pretty much random and I do try to experiment with rythm a lot (and often, Digi criticizes me with that). This is one example of my attempts and tinkerings with rythm.



The summer winds blow from the north;
I feel it touching my face at evening.
I close my eyes to imagine…
Slowly, I relaxed and eased my breathing.

Tonight, I could see paradise.
I could see beautiful and dazzling lights.
Vast meadows of fragrant flowers,
Where there are infinite days and no nights.

I lay stretched out on the meadow,
And inhaled the fragrant and summer breeze.
It brings back so much memory,
Back then when I played under the trees.

Childhood and days of innocence,
Running along on the sandy beaches,
And laughter carried by the wind,
To the many things that life teaches.

Imagery, imagery, imagery. That's what I'm attempting here. Not really focused on anything else but imagery.

Lady Akita
January 25th, 2006, 10:57 PM
Yish, how can you say they're bad. Alot better than what I have, at least. I can reflect to them pretty well, and the descriptions are vivid. You write alot better than me, that's for sure. ^^

oni flygon
January 26th, 2006, 5:19 PM
Ah, I'm flattered. Thanks for that and here's some more:

Too early for spring but I'd love to post this:

Spring Has Come Quickly

Spring has come quite quickly…
The birds chirp cheerfully,
Hopping from branch to branch,
While I sit below the tree

Spring has come quite quickly…
I watch the snow melt from the branches.
Then I saw pink blossoms take their place,
Whereas they fall down softly and slowly

I sit here while I watch Mother Earth
Wear her green gown filled with blossoms.
Her fragrant perfume wafts around me;
I feel her arms cradling me to sleep.

Under the blooming cherry tree,
I’ve yet to see her innocent smile.
I continue to wait for that girl;
Ever patient, for spring has come.

oni flygon
January 28th, 2006, 11:01 PM
Adding some more stuff into it:

This one's an old work of mine so it's bound to be crappy... lol. Sometimes I kinda criticize and make fun of my own teen angst back then.


What’s this horrible sensation in my chest?
My stomach ties in knots and my heart twists
I was suddenly scared to look at her companion
I could not help but to ball my fists

I shook my head to get these thoughts out of me
She’s just a friend and you could just care less
It’s not your problem and it’s best to leave them alone
You should be happy and don’t make yourself stress

Everything is in my head but it all seems real
He’s walking her home like what I used to do
He’s taking her places where I took her before
It’s hard to take it off your head when you see those two

My head aches as I clenched my own hair
These horrible thoughts of her with this guy
Won’t go away as I pray out loud
I go down on my knees, asking Him: “Why?”

She said she could never love him back
Like me, he was just a friend of hers
But the green-eyed monster comes out of me
In me, horrible jealousy occurs

Envy, jealousy, desire, covet
Whatever you may want to call it
I have it and I want it to go away
I’m quite desperate, I must admit

I locked this horrible feeling inside
And at the outside, you could see me smile
I just hope I could keep it within me
While not making my mind hostile

So she said hello and I greeted her back
Next to her, I see him follow close
She’s with him again, I see and I understand
This guy is just her friend, I suppose

January 29th, 2006, 11:34 AM
Your sense of poetry is sublime,
although some lines didn't match in time,
but you'll improve; I'm sure you will
for who am I to judge your skill?

XD! I couldn't help it. They're all wonderful with that same Niko-styled aura of writing. It's true, however, that some stanzas sounded awkward (in my perspective). If you read over it outloud, you'll see what I mean.

Still, nice job on all of them. Poetry freak. =3

oni flygon
January 29th, 2006, 11:39 AM
Ah, yes... rythm is one thing that I'm not gifted with...>>

oni flygon
February 2nd, 2006, 10:06 PM
And here's one of my better poems. Written exactly a year ago so I hope you guys enjoy this one! =D


Love is a very mysterious thing
It can be this warm feeling inside
A feeling of longing or happiness
Or something that is so hard to hide

Love can be the sun whereas it shines
Down at two lovers sitting together
They would be holding each other’s hands
Today under such a fine weather

Love can also be the rhymes in this poem
It’s every word escaping my lips
Sweet like nectar from a beautiful flower
Soft like cotton through my fingertips

Love can be the weight of a human heart
It’s the guide that leads my soul to her
Love can be anything in this world
It’s also the thing that makes my spirit stir

Love can bring down the strongest man
It can bind that man in love’s strong chains
Love can make that man weak and powerless
But it can also take away his pains

And yet love can also be so cold and so cruel
When one longs for someone, they become love’s fool
What exactly is love? One might question
Is it a feeling or is it an obsession?

When these questions are left unanswered
We could only ask ourselves: “What is love?”
To me, love is a very vast mystery
It could be or could not be the things above

Careful With That Axe, Pichu!
February 25th, 2006, 7:44 PM
I like that one alot. Your metaphors make me remember a certain songwriter, I don't know why. But I like the concept, the way you define love as, what I would understand, a double-edged sword.

Love can be the weight of a human heart---------10
It’s the guide that leads my soul to her------------9
Love can be anything in this world------------------9
It’s also the thing that makes my spirit stir------11

Well, that kind of rhythm 'disfunction' can be easily fixed as a song, but when you read it as a poem it sounds a bit messy, I don't know if I explain myself ^^;

But overall I'd throw this poem a 9 out of 10.

*Winds And Her Smile is still favorite*