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code zerro the deluge
January 26th, 2006, 02:22 PM
this is my life in words I guess....

I been the butt of someone's jokes for so long.
people say I am gay your a girl go put on a thong.
I don't know my real father mama too sick.
it makes me mad being lied to about this ****.

But I will come back get her out the bed.
I may be scared but i wasn't dared.
I will do it.
and prove it.
I am to strong to let herself like this carry on

why lord why me ohh why.
until the day comes I will see the light.
but maybe you are shining down on me.
saying to me to fight
for what I beleive
and continuie to dream

Before i thought run away that is the plan.
I get in truble so now they call me the man.
I guess I am.
I will find a cure for this diesease.
make her happy take her out of the sheets.
if my dad is gone than **** him that *****.
Left a family of 5.
he missed out but every once in a while i cry

why lord why me ohh why.
until the day comes I will see the light.
but maybe you are shining down on me.
saying to me to fight
for what I beleive
and continuie to dream

I repent my sines now I help the kids
From growing up missing out like i did.
It took a while for me to see
It is his fault soon he will see.
I hate hime.
now my friend say why.
Is this the same kid who always cried.
No way he is to happy.
yes i am now that I realized
that God has shown with me through my cries of.

why lord why me ohh why.
until the day comes I will see the light.
but maybe you are shining down on me.
saying to me to fight
for what I beleive
and continuie to dream

Lady Akita
January 26th, 2006, 06:13 PM
Awwie..sad. But please, use capitals in your works. Lack of is very inconvinent for the reader. I mean, the poem was great, but I was too busy looking at your uncapitalized 'I's to enjoy what was written. ><;

code zerro the deluge
January 27th, 2006, 12:59 PM
ok thanx La. ohh and what up.

Lily
January 27th, 2006, 06:07 PM
There's a DCC thread in Other Chat if you want to have a conversation. ^_^;

I, for one, am amazed you've succeeded in describing your twelve years of life in a single poem. Putting aside the grammatical errors, I think it's pretty profound if you look at it a certain way. I love some specific lines, as they were surprisingly well put for someone your age. It sounds like your life wasn't all that perfect; then again, no life is.

Nice job, zerro. It was really good. Next time try working on the grammar part of it. The content itself was intriguing, although I disagree with the profanity~ XP

code zerro the deluge
January 28th, 2006, 10:30 AM
thankx thanx. i really appreciate it.