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Mr.Pokemon
February 22nd, 2006, 07:21 PM
The Adventures of Tom(title in the making)
Intro
My name is Tom. I am 11 years old. I have pretty long brown hair and I usually wear my dark blue jeans and an average sweatshirt. I live in a town called Cyan City. It was only very recently founded. Our house is your average Pokemon house. You walk in; you have the kitchen, and the dining room. If you go beyond that you see a staircase, if you walk up it, you see the bedroom. Nothing special! But anyways, lets get to the story.

It was 9:00PM. I was asleep, or at least trying to. I was starting to fall asleep when I heard a sudden, “ROUND THREE, OF THE ULTIMATE POKEMON COMPITITION!” It was the Ultimate Pokemon Competition, my dream. It was very famous in my town. It was when the best Pokemon trainers have a big competition. The winner, gets 3 master balls and tons of respect. I really wanted to go watch it but my parents say, “It is a school night! And you can’t be up that late!” But any ways, I looked out the window and saw the light from the stadium and heard the announcers. I closed the window shades furiously and shoved my head in the pillow. I wanted to go so bad! But I finally fell asleep.

Lily
February 22nd, 2006, 07:32 PM
Please post your stories in the actual fanfiction section. *moves* ^_^;

Also, your story is a bit short to be qualified as a decent one... I'd advise you to read the Fanfiction Writing Guide, stickied in the Writer's Lounge.

Mr.Pokemon
February 22nd, 2006, 07:46 PM
srry bout the forum thing :classic:

but this is just a piece of the VERY beginning, its basicly like a prievew or an advertisment (if you want to call it that)

emoBill™
February 25th, 2006, 08:07 AM
Then it should go in the Author's Cafe'. Hope your story becomes really good ^_^