Deadly Infatuation

[Eliana]

Yeah, wrote this a while back. =] Enjoy.


Deadly Infatuation

So starts the obsession, this endless infatuation
Waiting to explode, time for evacuation
You call it “love” but that’s untrue
Biting off more than you possibly chew

You’re a stranger now, fallen to your sickly emotions
Drowning in lust that started this commotion

You just might crash if you don’t slow down
You’re aiming high but you’ll hit the ground
Before you know it, it’s gone in midair
Deadly Infatuation; enter if you dare

So starts the romance, this artificial passion
Going nowhere, your “stylistic fashion”
You call it “bonding” but you’re wrong
Go ahead, lead yourselves on

You’re a victim now, head over heels in chemical love
No surfacing now, you just can’t get enough

You just might crash if you don’t slow down
You’re aiming high but you’ll hit the ground
Before you know it, it’s gone in midair
Deadly Infatuation; enter if you dare

Can’t you feel the “love” tonight?
The illusion of your friendless mind
desperately searching for a single find
Shame you’re looking to no avail
You’re trying too hard, but you’re going to fail.

You just might crash if you don’t slow down
You’re aiming high but you’ll hit the ground
Before you know it, it’s gone in midair
Deadly Infatuation, enter if you dare

[Persona]

hey that's pretty good ^^ but XD all of the words that needed comma's u put question marks in them, u might wanna fix that lol O.o

[Kylie-chan]

Wow, I really like that one, Eli! <3 I don't understand why you capitalised the "I" of infatuation all throughout the writing, though.

It flows neatly, and it's spelt and written well.

In fact, other than the infatuation thing, my only issue with it is "Biting off more than you possibly chew". It might just be me, but I don't get how it makes sense in the context of the song...

Anyway, nice work! <333

[Eliana]

hey that's pretty good ^^ but XD all of the words that needed comma's u put question marks in them, u might wanna fix that lol O.o
*shakes head* you're using unicode or something. =/



Kylie: I dunno. I know you usually do that when it's the title, but it's not a required thing. I completely agree on the sentence, though..I've been attempting to fix it.

[Kylie-chan]

Ah, okay. It's fine as it is, just doesn't quite make sense xD;

[Eliana]

Ah, okay. It's fine as it is, just doesn't quite make sense xD;
OH!

*explains* o_O xD

It basically means the person is trying way too hard.

There. =]

[Merzbau]

I have a funny feeling I know who and what this poem is about...XD

Even so, I do gotta say it was well written. Kylie's right about the capitalization thing; it should be lowercase. Harsh and to the point, I like the way it flows. I'm just not much for the last line of repetition. But that's just me; I hardly ever use it, me writing songs normally. And you might wanna fix it back up. The Unicode swith kinda screwed it up. XD

[Kylie-chan]

OH!

*explains* o_O xD

It basically means the person is trying way too hard.

There. =]
Ohhh, I get it. It all makes sense now.