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March 23rd, 2006, 9:13 PM
lol. this is probabbly the shortest poem i made...yet

From The Start

i dont know how much i have to take
for this pain to end and fade
coz im sick and tired of trying hard
to forget everything we did

its like throwing away the treasures of life
wasting everything for the sakes of each other
i couldnt forgive myself for knowing
that a special person like you takes away everything i have

now this cosmic explosion that killed my mind
is poisoning every bit of my life
no matter how hard i try
i always come back to the start

April 16th, 2006, 2:11 PM
On couldnt there should have been an apostrope and the i's should be cap. Dang I sound formal. I like it I wish it was longer though. ^_^ Hehe Its great even if its short.

April 16th, 2006, 7:57 PM
heh...this was a very long poem that i posted...and i thought no one liked it, so no one posted...yeah i kinda suck at poetry before...but im trying my hardest to improve...thanks for commenting! it really means alot to me!

code zerro the deluge
April 18th, 2006, 12:15 PM
he said what you needed but other than that it is good.

April 18th, 2006, 1:07 PM
A nice poem, and thanks, as always, for sharing. A couple of typos and grammatical errors that I'd fix, but that aren't truly neccissary. Keep up the good work! You really are improving!

April 18th, 2006, 5:08 PM
hmm....i really thank fallen for this...this was a very looooong-ago poem stuck in this forum...i think it was my third or fourth poem posted here...thanks everyone! and especially to fallen...*huggles*