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Chibi-chan
April 6th, 2006, 04:01 PM
Erm, I'm doing poetry now, so I decided to post what I've written! :3 I'm not that good at it, so some constructive criticism would be loved <3


Winter a Sonnet

The winter season begins to fall down
On the once cheerful fallen autumn leaves.
The wildlife is nowhere to be found.
The forest is swept by the Northern breeze.
White powdered snow falls gently on the land,
Trees then become bare and are cut for heat.
Children are armed with hot cocoa on hand,
Ready to create in the snow they will meet.
Snow into snowballs and that into forts,
Watching falling snowflakes and catching them,
Wrapped in a blanket of snow and comfort.
No one will wish for the spring to begin.
And those from the South may just not now know,
Winter is best if you play in the snow.

I might post more in the future. Please comment your ideas ^-^ <3

Lily
April 8th, 2006, 06:18 AM
Proper format, a relevant theme...I'm sorry; I'm not much of a sonnet expert. XD It does resolve something in the end, and the overall tone you used with winter is portrayed nicely. Good job. ^^;

(I'll just move this to Poetry, then..)