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Kaeru_ike
April 10th, 2006, 12:08 AM
This day has been a hell to me
That's why i'm doing this, you see
I'll leave this place forever
So you and me will be a Never
Free...

I need some - Free time
To clare up my mind
Free time
To make me go back time
Free time
To get back to my life
Free time - To clear up this mess

En-En-Enough - Enough - Enough - Enough
In time, you make me blind, within your mind, i'll press rewind

Something new is waiting for me
Things that you and me should see
But you ain't with me anymore
That's one thing new for sure

I need some - Free time
To clare up my mind
Free time
To make me go back time
Free time
To get back to my life
Free time - To clear up this mess

En-En-Enough - Enough - Enough - Enough
In time, you make me blind, within your mind, i'll press rewind

Stop hiding
I'm ready
Please stop fighting
I've had my free time

Enough - Enough - Enough - Enough - Enough - Enough - Enough - Enough - free time...

phantom_zangetsu
April 10th, 2006, 05:09 AM
hmm...good one. hey i guess im the first one too reply to your poem....well i like yuor poem really, me too, i wish i had free time.....some spelling errors but its still cool...

Christos
April 10th, 2006, 07:38 AM
Nice poem Li-Kero :)
Make some more ;)

Emma
April 10th, 2006, 08:16 AM
Nice poem :) Some words need correcting but other than that it's quite good ^_^

Kalylia
April 10th, 2006, 10:02 AM
Definatly a different poem, and that's always nice to see. Sometimes, people get so bogged down with what should be done in a poem that they're afraid to do anything different. It was good, the message was clean and simple, and you didn't have to look too hard to find it.

Nice work, so keep it up! (That seems to be becoming my catch-phrase in here...*runs to find something suitable to shoot self with*)