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fallen_angel
April 13th, 2006, 01:47 PM
Hey everybody I hope you enjoy this poem. ^_^

Search and Find

No on seems to understand,
just who I am.
Looking but not seeing,
searching but not finding.

I try to make it easy,
for them to search and find.
The road is not so easy,
it tiries my mind.

What more can I say.
its the same everyday.
Eating me up
deep inside.

Waiting for the one who will,
search and find, look and see.
So, then there will be,
no more misery for me.

Midori Chi
April 13th, 2006, 02:12 PM
Yay!

This one is really good.

Your rhyming is awesome but the rhythm could be a little better. I think you could have each little verse to be a bit longer.

Keep up the woderful work! =D

Kalylia
April 13th, 2006, 02:49 PM
The rhythm was a little off, but it wasn't [I]bad]/I]. I think you're doing wonderful work, and improving as well, far as I can see. Keep it up, fallen angel, and you'd ve suprised where you can go.

phantom_zangetsu
April 13th, 2006, 04:32 PM
...that was a nice poem....i really liked it...your rhyming is very nice and a little catchy...hehe....but im already here i already found you...i wont leave your side...im always here...beside you...ü

fallen_angel
April 15th, 2006, 01:33 PM
Thanks everybody. Awww thanks phantom_of_death......i'll never leave your side.

code zerro the deluge
April 15th, 2006, 05:16 PM
bravo Bravo I like it. keep it up.

Persona
April 15th, 2006, 05:23 PM
its very good, i just saw tiny spelling error.

"it tiries my mind"

but, who cares? xD

Rokuo_Mitarashi
April 18th, 2006, 02:35 PM
I think its wonderful! You're Good!

fallen_angel
April 22nd, 2006, 08:43 AM
haha I can't spell very well. Thanks everybody!