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code zerro the deluge
April 13th, 2006, 03:59 PM
Love is like a dream
Where you can learn and be
Just as ordinary
Or take a chance
And take a glance
Hoping she will glacnce back

Love is like a song
When things go rong
You wan't to feel it
Trust and beleive it
Then you hope it don't go and keep it

Love is like a poet
One who can flow and show it
Never let's you down
Makes it so you always smile around

Love is like you and me
Together through harmony
Where we can be free
Because love is free to be
But will you beleive?

That is you answer cause no one can say it for you
That is truer than true
When I call you my boo
Make sure you tell him or her I love you

fallen_angel
April 13th, 2006, 06:29 PM
There are some spelling errors but other then that this is a really good poem. ^_^

phantom_zangetsu
April 13th, 2006, 06:32 PM
hwow! finally, a poem from the hood...LOL! well, i just want to say...that poem's cool...no rap blings and stuff....

code zerro the deluge
April 14th, 2006, 05:16 AM
thanx you guys. I was going back to poetry days. I am still going to do poetry as well.

pink-tiger
April 14th, 2006, 05:35 AM
its really good..^^
I like it..its really sweet....

code zerro the deluge
April 14th, 2006, 05:48 AM
thank you pink-tiger. Thanx for your compliement.

Lily
April 14th, 2006, 05:58 AM
I actually like this one rather than your other rap-styled ones. It sounds more..poetic and just simple. Some parts sounded a bit awkward (try reading it out loud) and some parts just didn't make sense/were too repetitive. Again, if you edit your own work, you'd be amazed at how much you can fix. All in all, not bad. It's certainly an improvement from your other ones. =]

code zerro the deluge
April 14th, 2006, 06:00 AM
thank you lily. I am glad you like it.