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Sean Fury
April 5th, 2004, 5:44 PM
Depths of the streetlamp
Street is cold, street is damp
A once white moon, now colored blue
Like the ocean, dark of hue
A shadow crosses, just a blur
Was it flesh, or was it fur?

A stalking figure, at a glance
Seems to dissapear, at a pass
"Who is there?!" You call out
No one answers, and so you pout
You turn your back, "Only the wind."
But was it wind, or was it 'him'?
Iori Yagami says:
Within the darkness, there is a crack
You freeze in place, and turn your back
"Who is there?!" You shout once more
But you only hear the opening door
You turn around, there is a house
In the sill, you spy a mouse?

"What is this?" You dare to wonder
But travel in at the sound of thunder
A distant cry, the sound of dead
Your body shoots up, sweat drips from your head

You realize it was just a nightmare
But you turn your head, and at the door
A shadowed figure, in the moor
Then 'he' is there.

April 6th, 2004, 6:07 PM
nice job i liked your poem very much. very thrilling. (seriously! :) )

i especially liked how you added the "oh, it's only a nightmare" thing and then, boom, the thing from the dream is there. kind of like jeepers creepers...oh, sorry, getting off topic.

Sean Fury
April 6th, 2004, 6:08 PM
Thank-you ^^. I really didn't think it was good at all, but you've encouraged me to write more now...yay x.x

May 14th, 2004, 3:54 PM
I thought it was very good! Very good indeed. It was very realistic.

May 14th, 2004, 3:57 PM
ok im not that into poems lol but it was pretty good

May 14th, 2004, 5:28 PM
Sweet Lady, that's good. reminds me a lot of Poe. You've got a lot of talent, and I mean a LOT. Please, do write more. If you don't mind, I'd like to post this on a couple other forums for critique.

Sean Fury
May 18th, 2004, 4:31 AM
This one, I wrote just yesterday, is called "The Raven, Revisited". It's modeled after my favorite poem, "The Raven", and it's basically told from Poe's nephew's point of view (pretending he has one if he didn't). But anyway, here it is:

I went to visit my dear uncles grave
But upon arrival, my knees did gave
From the call, which caused my fall
A ghastly cry, shaking me to my core
Quoth the Raven Nevermore

So I rose, for one last time
Yelling at the beast for his rythme
Go Raven, now, back to the shore
You arent wanted, back to the shore!
But alone called the Raven Nevermore

Wondering what to do, with the beast of ghastly hue
I called to him, Come hither, I wish a better view.
Yet alone he sat, not to move, perched upon the stone
I rose to meet him, but soon he had gone
Calling behind, Nevermore.

Uncles house was rather silent
Until I spied the Raven defiant
Perched upon a painting of Lenore
Down! I called, To the floor!
But alone he called, Nevermore.

Upon uncles chamber finding
The Raven soon despising
A sickly smell that was rising
In the chair and above the door
No longer alone, quoth the Raven, Nevermore.

Sean Fury
May 18th, 2004, 4:45 AM
Yeah, double post, I know, but I cant get online that often anymore and I wanted to post this one too!

Thunder roars and lightning cracks
Like the sound of a baseball bat
People run and people flee
While one man laughs with glee

Dressed in black, cape and sword
He kills without a single word
No thought or expression cross his face
He only lives to destroy this place

All the Earth, shouts in fear
As he draws ever near
Reckless and wild, the bullets fly
Screaming and whistling, they race by

He doesnt dodge, doesnt move
Just basks in the glory, of his blood hue
With a last breath, he finally speaks
Life is only for the weak.

May 19th, 2004, 3:46 PM
That was a very good poem. :classic: :classic: :classic:
Very well done!!!! :laugh: :laugh: :laugh:

Sean Fury
May 19th, 2004, 6:13 PM
Since I have FINALLY gotten my computer back online, I think I will just bombard you all with a bunch of poems, sound good? I thought so. Just because I haven't posted any like this yet, these are five love poems dedicated to this girl I like...I actually wrote about twenty of them over the past few days, but I won't post them ALL :p

Someting I don't normally discuss
Because I don't want to cause a fuss
These feelings of mine, so complicated
Although they make me so irritated
And always with the agitation
Because when I turn the ignition
My feelings burst from their hiding
All this time, went into biding
I've been peaceful, and waiting so very long
So maybe I'll write, one more song
To tell her my feelings, so very true
I love you Auna, yes I do

Take A Chance
Though you've done this in the past
Taken risks, that wouldn't last
However, their mark remains
It's still the same
So perhaps I'll do this on my own
May I have, one last dance?
Just come with me, take a chance
You may enjoy it, you'll never know
That is, unless, you don't want to go
But I'll understand
Can't let it go to my head
I'll be alright, and I won't die
Just sit here alone and cry

Forever still
You'll see the light
Coming in the window sill
And even in, the darknest night
Keep your candle burning through
For if your fire, is burning bright
You will know, I miss you too
But if it faulters, out of sight
Don't worry, I will not forget you
All my fights, my endless plight
Everything is for you, all I do
But even with all my might
I can't make you say "I love you too"

Pain driving inside of me
From all these feelings I don't get
But if you could only see
How high the bar was set
I think that you'd agree
I shouldn't waste this bet
On something that'll never be
Like a fish, caut in a net
Undoubting concern, this self-regret
I can't stop, feeling this way
I can't help it, getting harder to breath
I feel like this, every single day
I'll swear it until the day of my death
But that's when you'll hear her say
She'll swear those words unto me now
I love you, forever now

A delicate face and meaningful eyes
A personality that leaves nothing to despise
Wonderful talents, like skillful fighting
Such beauty you see, just like lightning
A gracious smile, kind words too
Speak with her, and be no longer blue
Generous words with much gratitude
Did I mention that sweet attitude?
So many, many things...
Yet so little synonums

May 20th, 2004, 12:32 PM
Very touching poem. :'(
Keep up the good work!!!! :D

Sean Fury
May 20th, 2004, 2:01 PM
Well, since I received some praise on them, I guess I'll post some more. Oh, and not like you all care, but the girl (Auna), is falling in love with me :D (or so I've heard).

The Last Kiss
Now that it's finally come down to this
Maybe we can speak alone
Everyday, my chance is amiss
But I always act like a stone
While the others hiss
I just want, you to throw me a bone
And give me just, one last kiss

Not Just a Crush
Why is it, always like this
All I want, is one dumb kiss
Fragile lips, spit so sweet
All I want, is a kiss so deep
I love her so, so very much
It's much more, then just a crush
What kind of prood do you want?
I'll take any test and I will not fault
I'll prove my love, just wait and see
For something that, should really be
Someday, she'll be with me, for eternity

Just a Day
I hate to say this, but I have to say
There is no one, for me today
But even with, flowers of May
And fresh water of the bay
I'm certain this, won't be okay
All I ask, is for a single day
A single day without your pay
Spend time with me, and maybe, hey
A good time, sure, call it gay
Even though, please don't vote nay
For it would be my happiest day

[Please ignore spelling errors and/or messed up words, I typed these late at night]