View Full Version : my incredibly weird poetry

April 6th, 2004, 06:16 PM
this was for an English assignment, but i'm really bad at poetry, but then i started laughing at my own poetry, so...

they're alphabet poems (you look at a letter, see what it reminds you of, and write about it) well, here goes!
C (The moon)
Sitting in the sky
Shining so brightly on this warm summer night
Waiting, hoping
For a star to pass by

J (A fishing hook)
Floating in the water
Hanging with a worm
Waiting for a stupid fish
To eat it and die*
*sorry to all fish/animal lovers

yea, it's weird :P , tell me what ya think!

April 7th, 2004, 07:19 PM
i like them!! more! more!

April 10th, 2004, 03:23 PM
"waiting for a star to pass by" ok...
Other than that I would like to see some more. :bandit:

April 20th, 2004, 05:42 PM
horriball HORRIBALL just kidden

May 14th, 2004, 03:40 PM
They are okay... The Idea is really neat, but the poems are awefully short. They kinda remind me of Hiiku's....

May 14th, 2004, 03:44 PM
im not even going to reply to that.....

oops i just did =P

May 14th, 2004, 03:49 PM
I wasn't trying to be mean, I was just expessing my opinion. It is something that's supposed to happen when you post your own works. "Take the ups with the downs and move on"

May 14th, 2004, 03:52 PM
lol i wasnt not replying to u :? *that confused me*

i was just not replying even though i did but umm this is really confusing :/

May 14th, 2004, 05:20 PM
The first one is fairly good. If it was thought out it could fit quite well into a Petriarchian Sonnet. The second, though, seems rather rushed and sloppy. Not at all pleasent to read.