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coco
April 6th, 2004, 06:16 PM
this was for an English assignment, but i'm really bad at poetry, but then i started laughing at my own poetry, so...

they're alphabet poems (you look at a letter, see what it reminds you of, and write about it) well, here goes!
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C (The moon)
Sitting in the sky
Shining so brightly on this warm summer night
Waiting, hoping
For a star to pass by

J (A fishing hook)
Floating in the water
Hanging with a worm
Waiting for a stupid fish
To eat it and die*
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*sorry to all fish/animal lovers

yea, it's weird :P , tell me what ya think!

lighterhead2001
April 7th, 2004, 07:19 PM
i like them!! more! more!

PM2008
April 10th, 2004, 03:23 PM
"waiting for a star to pass by" ok...
Other than that I would like to see some more. :bandit:

darkness34
April 20th, 2004, 05:42 PM
horriball HORRIBALL just kidden

Mew13
May 14th, 2004, 03:40 PM
They are okay... The Idea is really neat, but the poems are awefully short. They kinda remind me of Hiiku's....

Blitz~2005
May 14th, 2004, 03:44 PM
im not even going to reply to that.....

oops i just did =P

Mew13
May 14th, 2004, 03:49 PM
I wasn't trying to be mean, I was just expessing my opinion. It is something that's supposed to happen when you post your own works. "Take the ups with the downs and move on"

Blitz~2005
May 14th, 2004, 03:52 PM
lol i wasnt not replying to u :? *that confused me*

i was just not replying even though i did but umm this is really confusing :/

~Ozy~
May 14th, 2004, 05:20 PM
The first one is fairly good. If it was thought out it could fit quite well into a Petriarchian Sonnet. The second, though, seems rather rushed and sloppy. Not at all pleasent to read.