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code zerro the deluge
June 25th, 2006, 04:23 PM
Couse I think I'm crazy
Couse you think I'm crazy
I know I'm crazy over you

Couse I think I'm crazy
Couse you think I'm crazy
I know I'm crazy over you


Baby I love you
You are mine forever it's true
This is my goal
People laugh well bless there soul

Though my time could be almost up
Remeber if were stuck
I died in love

Couse I think I'm crazy
Couse you think I'm crazy
I know I'm crazy over you

Couse I think I'm crazy
Couse you think I'm crazy
I know I'm crazy over you


This is my mojo
My bird nest they call me the crow
Sneaky and sick
We met in a bliss

I'm alone I'm alone alone
On the phone on the phone phone
My loves to strong to strong to strong
It's the only way to go

Couse I think I'm crazy
Couse you think I'm crazy
I know I'm crazy over you

Couse I think I'm crazy
Couse you think I'm crazy
I know I'm crazy over you

ArKiVe
June 25th, 2006, 06:19 PM
Grammar mistakes. Don't repeat yourself. I know you are 12, but this needs work. The idea was nice though. Just needs work.

~Summer Queen~
June 25th, 2006, 08:43 PM
Lol it's very cute but you do have to get your grammer right XD.
It sort of sounds like a song XD

Kylie-chan
June 26th, 2006, 05:17 AM
It's apparently hip-hop/rap of some sort.

No offence, but it's also a pretty poor one for its type... Corrections & notes in red.

Couse* I think I'm crazy
Couse* you think I'm crazy
I know I'm crazy over you
*The word is 'cause. Apostrophe because it is a contraction of because. :3

Couse I think I'm crazy
Couse you think I'm crazy
I know I'm crazy over you


Baby, I love you
You are mine forever; it's true
This is my goal
People laugh - well, bless there* soul[color=red]s+
*the word is their. There is a preposition. Their is a possessive pronoun.
+You're referring to people, which is a plural. Therefore, the correct word to use is souls.

Firstly, what the hell? To be honest, this whole verse made little sense to me. It seemed to me like you were just shoving rhyme after rhyme without thinking about its actual meaning. :/ Bless their souls just seemed totally out of context.

Though my time could be almost up,
Remember, if we're* stuck,
I died in love
*Were = plural form of was in the past tense. We're = contraction of we are. Also, I'm lost as to what you meant by "if we're stuck".

Couse I think I'm crazy
Couse you think I'm crazy
I know I'm crazy over you

Couse I think I'm crazy
Couse you think I'm crazy
I know I'm crazy over you

This is my mojo,
My bird nest - they call me the crow
Sneaky and sick
We met in a bliss
Nothing overly wrong with this part, except for the, er, slang. "We met in a bliss"?

I'm alone; I'm alone, alone
On the phone, on the phone, phone
My love's* to+ strong to strong to strong
It's the only way to go

*Please learn the correct usage of apostrophes. Loves = a verb form, or a plural. love's = usually a contraction of "love is".
+Two = number.
Too = adjective.
To = preposition.

The correct word is too.

Couse I think I'm crazy
Couse you think I'm crazy
I know I'm crazy over you

Couse I think I'm crazy
Couse you think I'm crazy
I know I'm crazy over you

In summary, it was fragmented, rather nonsensical, and rather cliched, but good on you for trying. :D In future, spellcheck it, although beware of spellcheckers picking up "mistakes" that aren't there. The rest of you can shoot me if I forgot something. D: It's late.