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phantom_zangetsu
July 29th, 2006, 06:33 PM
well my old one dies coz of lazy posting...LOL! so i got a new one!

The Friends That I Have
I don’t even know what you say
All that’s left is to sit down and pray
I don’t even want to know how you came here
Coz now my love is nowhere near

All those lies behind sorrow and hate
Is just like an empty classroom gate
Full of dust for me to kick off the ground
...now as my world spins around

A hand from you jumps away
And a hand from a friend comes to stay
A friend I never thought could save me from you
And lead me to something that could be true

Every time I hold their hand feels like forever
Much more forever that the one you gave on September
I’m not complaining, really, just thinking out loud
And trying to escape your big, dark cloud

A Word to Change
can someone answer me?
how can i set my whole life free?
is it to late to change the way things are?
eventhough she's there...is it really that far?

i wasnt prepared to say goodbye
i said something that looked like a lie
should i just lie and wait here?
or should i stand and face my fear?

all i need is an answer from you
do you think my life could still be sky blue?
could i still change the way you look at me?
or just ignore and let you be?

i know we take on different roads
but my road seems to be full of loads
from every bit of piece you tore away
to my broken heart that seemed forever to stay that way

pink-tiger
July 30th, 2006, 11:01 AM
Wow really good brother..I like the first one its awsome.

Yuki N.
August 6th, 2006, 05:06 PM
Good rhyming schemes, I have to admit that. But the rhythm and meter wanders a little bit so I find it awkward to read it aloud... x_x

Good job though and maybe improving the structure of the poems will make it even better! ^-^