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White_Winter_Wolf
September 29th, 2006, 07:33 PM
Why me lord
What did I do
I made sure that
I always followed you

If I were to sin
I begged you for forgivness
Why hand me a curse
And not eternal bless

You promised me immortal life
Yet you rob me of mine
And Peter's 'heaven entries' book
I soon will one day sign

Lord I thought you loved
I forever listened to you
The distrust that I am feeling
I only wish you knew

But the bible says you do know
You feel everything that I do
And now I understand lord
You want me up next to you

Lily
September 30th, 2006, 11:56 AM
This is really quite touching... =D I love your poem's message.

Minor faults: typos, awkward rhythm, lack of punctuation, i.e. commas and such.

Disregarding those, I liked it! It felt sincere and genuine, and quite encouraging for one such as myself to read.

But the bible says you do know
You feel everything that I do
And now I understand lord
You want me up next to you

Particularly that stanza. I feel you did an overall okay job on it. Wonderful message. ^__^

Until ThenxX
October 1st, 2006, 05:03 PM
Yeah, an awkward rythm, but, I loved it. It was heartwarming, and, although I'm not Catholic, I still like it. Keep it up!

.-'Infernal Hylian'-.
October 1st, 2006, 09:28 PM
That has sooo many meanings. well done, i am a christian so thats so cool to see people write about things like that, well done again and keep it up.

Jesus Freak Josh
October 2nd, 2006, 03:38 AM
w00t - Go Christians! It was a pretty good poem, though I do get a bit nitpicky when people forget to captialise things like 'Lord' and 'Bible'. But yeah, good job.