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Deoxys55
April 19th, 2004, 05:33 PM
This is the diary of a 15-year-old girl living in sotopois(sp?) at the time that deoxys crashed to earth. I will add on days only if people comment on it!

July 15th, 2004
Well, it's finally Saturday. The proffesor here at our townis going into the desert outside the city walls. He belives that there could be undiscovered pokmon there, and he wants to be the first to find them. He is taking some assistants and his young son, Tooi, with him on the exploration. I hope to find out more soon.

Skye
April 19th, 2004, 05:39 PM
hmm....an interesting take...I'll be interested to see longer entries, and I can't wait to see how your character developes! Go for it!

Omega-Brendan
April 21st, 2004, 01:37 AM
I spotted 4 typos... and I think this just needed around 2 minutes to complete so I won't really think its a good fanfic, of course, if you add more length to it and do it on word (GODDAMNIT!) then it would be much better.

Shinin
April 21st, 2004, 03:56 AM
its sootopolis not sotopois
deoxys crashed into a snowy area, not the desert

Deoxys55
April 21st, 2004, 12:30 PM
I know people they just relesed the new trailer so I'm having to redo some stuff and they are short because they are just little entries I'm getting longer ones done right now.