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oni flygon
October 6th, 2006, 09:39 PM
Just a little experiment with rhythm and structure. May be reminiscent to works of e.e. cummings.

I speak of beauty

I speak of beauty
whose…
soft fragrance wafts around me;
hung
on the air with her presence, and
crimson,
her sublime blushes did end.

I speak of beauty
when…
she smiles with utmost of glee
and I,
arms wrapped around her warmly—
Embrace!
keeps us one… eternally

I speak of beauty
when…
searching meticulously
for
words to describe her grace,
but, lo,
forgetting to place
the right words
on these weary lips,
that speak of beauty.

Careful With That Axe, Pichu!
October 6th, 2006, 09:50 PM
Great rhythm, and a nice, unusual, but fitting structure. As I said before, loved the first stanza... And the title too. It bursts quality from the beggining. >=D

Three words: Soft, warm and bold~