Mortal : Rise Of Elbargan

[Toadsworth]

http://www.freewebs.com/mortalwebsite/banner2.png
Thanks to Arbok for the Banner


Game Name : Mortal Rise Of Elbargan

Made With : RPG Maker XP

Introduction:

I'm making a non pokemon game. It's fully english and it's under active development. There's a site for it : www.Mortal.6x.to ... It's a game of the series Mortal. My friend makes another version of Mortal. Mortal : Battle Of The Elves.

Story

Arshes is a fourteen-year-old boy when the world meets Elbargan, a dark wizard who wants to rule the world. Arshes wakes up I a muddy swamp and hears a voice out of nothing… Cole, one of his friends sees him and takes him to the tent where his other friends are. In the tent, Cole comes with the news that the King is searching someone who wants to help him. When they enter the castle, the monsters come and they defeat them. Then, the king tells the real story and asks the team of Arshes(Arshes,Cole,Hilda, Scef) to defeat Elbargan. He says that the Royal Mage, Lantion can teleport them to the cities which are invaded by Elbargan. There, you adventure starts... But all things are not what you think of them...

Features

There are more coming, but I'm not very good in telling the features.

- More then 100 monsters!
- More then 100 skill attacks!
- Enormous lands with great graphics!
- You will get other characters to play with further in the game!
- Minigames!
- Simple Controls!
- 99 levels and various stats!

Demos

Demo is on the site. (http://www.freewebs.com/mortalwebsite/downloads2.htm)

Screenshots

More coming.

Arshes In A City (http://img279.imageshack.us/img279/899/pic1yx6.png)
Arshes standing next to a mage (http://img279.imageshack.us/img279/2338/pic2ts1.png)
Arshes in Mayor Kingston, the biggest city in the land (http://img339.imageshack.us/img339/4776/pic3bk3.png)
Arshes In A Snow City. (http://img339.imageshack.us/img339/8393/pic4tx6.png)

Progress

Mapping 50 %
Story 50 %
Characters 50 %
Monsters 60 %
Full Game 45 %

Comments please.

[Domin-8]

Your mapping is very poor, there is way too much open space.
Try to add some different color grass, and some other things to give i more life.

[Waudby]

Try not to be so symetrical with mapping, make some odd features and make things random, i do agree that your maps need work, they are not the worst i have seen however.

The story line sounds good, maybe if you could be willing to explain in a little more detail. Where did this "Elbargan" come from? Is he human?

Maybe some screenshots with some NPC's or a battle system or perhaps even just a screenshot with some dialogue!

Other than that, well done and keep up the work.

-Waudby-

[Toadsworth]

Your mapping is very poor, there is way too much open space.
Try to add some different color grass, and some other things to give i more life.

Okay, I'll try.



The story line sounds good, maybe if you could be willing to explain in a little more detail. Where did this "Elbargan" come from? Is he human?

Well, that's something that's told in the very last part of the game(when you have to fight him).

[The Dash]

This is your first RMXP game is it not?
Your mapping is extremely bland and uniteresting, try not making things so symetrical and adding more features to pretty up the place. Try and get away from the RTP graphics as they are overused. I also see that you are using the default names for the characters aswell, you should change them.
That's all I have to say really, keep trying.

Edit: Damnit! Take that link to RMXP : Postality Knights off your site! I cannot support a game that uses an illigal version of RMXP.

[Toadsworth]

:P I only use one default name. It's my first game.

And I'll try to make my own tilesets.