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doomo_1
December 29th, 2006, 09:46 AM
My heart cries, but you don’t hear it.

My heart breaks, but you don’t feel it.

My body longs to feel your arms around me.

My lips long to feel your kisses.

My ears long to hear you say I love you.

My eyes long to see your smile and eyes twinkle.

My life longs to have you in it.

My world longs to have you make it complete.

My body longs to feel you lie next to it.

My love longs to have you return it.

My heart will cry, my heart will break.

My body will go limp, my lips will only speak.

My ears will miss your words, my eyes will shed tears.

My life will be so lonely, my world will be so empty.

My love will go unreturned.

My heart aches as my life is turned inside out.

My mind will never forget, my heart will never let go.

I have loved you since the day I met you

But now my heart cries, and you don’t hear it

This was a poetry made by me before i broke up with my first gf....

Yesterday
January 21st, 2007, 04:06 PM
um... no offence but I think this is just a little repetitive. I think what would make your poem better is to take off those 'my' cuz it's just totally not that needed. I hope this helps O.o