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mew100
January 15th, 2007, 02:40 AM
Giovanni:What are you doing back?

James:Report.We finnaly captured Pikachu.

Pikachu:pika

Giovanni: Perfect.

*Back in hoenn*

Ash:*sob*

Brock: Dont worry Ash.We'll get those thiefs.

Ash:*wihps tears*

Lance:No time to wait.

Ash:Right.Go Shellder.

Brock:When you get a Shellder.

Ash:Back at the beach.

*Flashback*

Ash:Hey something bit my toe.

Shellder:shell.

Ash:Its a shellder.It seems weak.Dont worry Ill take good care of you.

Shellder:*smile*

*flashback end*

To be contined.

Natsuki
January 15th, 2007, 08:07 AM
Sorry, but this story doesn't really have the balance and body of an actual fanfic. It's more like a really short script for a play or something. :x Not saying it's bad, but you should try to compose a more thought-out plot and a more descriptive layout before posting this.

I'm closing the thread for now until you can re-create the story to fit basic fanfic guidelines. You're more than welcome to PM me if you want and I'll help you with ideas and stuff~ ^-^

*closes*

~Kelsey