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code zerro the deluge
January 27th, 2007, 05:44 PM
This might be the best thing since me
Something that just might be
As I truly see
Sometimes you got to let go
Sometimes things just don’t hold interest
Like they once did
And I would bid
My life for you

My last stanza
Just might become
Some of the best things I have ever done
And yes I am done
Yes I am done
Yes I have won.

Now you may ask
Why I am different
My lyrics my styles now listen
As I tell you
Just how I do
When I go through
This type of struggle
Without pumping my fist
This is my hour
My finale hour

My last stanza
Just might become
Some of the best things I have ever done
And yes I am done
Yes I am done
Yes I have won.

Even though the battle was won
I feel like I am done
No other things came to mind
But this time
This is my hour
My finale hour

My last stanza
Just might become
Some of the best things I have ever done
And yes I am done
Yes I am done
Yes I have won.

I just got to get this off my chest
I got to take a rest
My life my stress
My lyrics start to seem lifeless
Like this aint it
But I am still vicious.
So this Is my hour My finale hour

My last stanza
Just might become
Some of the best things I have ever done
And yes I am done
Yes I am done
Yes I have won.

pink-tiger
January 27th, 2007, 07:43 PM
Interesting usually you make poems that are happy and funny.But this is really sorta sad and something that you'll take time to think about.You've really improve and your spellings better.Either that or you typed to fast to notice the mistakes.Really good job zerro. I hope i've improve my spelling as well.^^ Keep it up.

Tetsuya
January 28th, 2007, 04:17 AM
Yes Very Interesting i didn't understand anything, but it was good it rhymed i liked it.

code zerro the deluge
January 28th, 2007, 05:25 AM
thanx guys. diffrent styles

Yesterday
January 29th, 2007, 06:54 PM
I'm sorry but I didn't get it >.< your rhymes are okay but I can't find a structure in your poem. Maybe if ya can make your poem be a bit more organized, it would help? I don't know, cuz that's just me ^w^

pink-tiger
January 30th, 2007, 06:02 PM
He it seems like a sad poem though ^^

Trikip
January 31st, 2007, 05:05 PM
You've really improve and your spellings better.

Funny.

Anyway, I don't know.

And yes I am done
Yes I am done
Yes I have won.

^ That just seems kind of...lame? I don't know. Kind of stupid, no offense. But that's just my opinion.

code zerro the deluge
February 1st, 2007, 04:14 PM
some lines are supposed to like have a repete to it.