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fallen_angel
April 9th, 2007, 08:24 AM
Hey, I haven't posted a poem in a very long time. But i'm coming back to the poetry thread. ^_^ I've never been good at rhythm so please bear with it. ><

Let us dance
in the rain,
let us cry
away all the pain.

Let us love
with no regrets.
Let us sing
of yesterday.

Live, be free
of past regrets.
Live carefree,
live happily.

I hope you enjoyed it. ;)

dstaley
April 9th, 2007, 08:24 PM
Very nice! Though, though, the rhythm isn't exactly on beat, but still, it's great.

Midori Chi
April 12th, 2007, 02:40 PM
Short and simple.

Nice, sissy. And welcome back to the forum. ^__^

fallen_angel
April 14th, 2007, 05:19 PM
Thanks. ^_^ I'm glad to be back.

phantom_zangetsu
April 22nd, 2007, 05:30 AM
your not the only one back! hehe *huggles*

same ol, same ol, eh? hehe....small but cute..hahaha....keep it up! ill post my new one later... *huggles*

oni flygon
April 24th, 2007, 07:46 PM
It's fun, short, happy... nothing too surprising, but the rhythm makes it stand out. I'm giddy for these kinds of rhythms, and I must say I'm totally biased because of it. For me, some poetry I prefer to read is in subtle whispers that poke you and catch your attention with every little pause... so this one got me.

fallen_angel
April 25th, 2007, 04:41 AM
Thanks phantom_zangetsu for dropping in! ^__^ Also oni flygon I think that was the best post on my poems i've ever gotten. Thanks!

phantom_zangetsu
April 25th, 2007, 11:21 PM
heheh, its okay, hey hey, you know? i kida got inspired by your poem, so i made something just like that....well, a bit like it but....oh, just check it out later...hehehe

btw, good job again...hehe keep it up