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April 9th, 2007, 04:24 PM
Hey, I haven't posted a poem in a very long time. But i'm coming back to the poetry thread. ^_^ I've never been good at rhythm so please bear with it. ><
Let us dance
in the rain,
let us cry
away all the pain.
Let us love
with no regrets.
Let us sing
Live, be free
of past regrets.
I hope you enjoyed it. ;)
April 10th, 2007, 04:24 AM
Very nice! Though, though, the rhythm isn't exactly on beat, but still, it's great.
April 12th, 2007, 10:40 PM
Short and simple.
Nice, sissy. And welcome back to the forum. ^__^
April 15th, 2007, 01:19 AM
Thanks. ^_^ I'm glad to be back.
April 22nd, 2007, 01:30 PM
your not the only one back! hehe *huggles*
same ol, same ol, eh? hehe....small but cute..hahaha....keep it up! ill post my new one later... *huggles*
April 25th, 2007, 03:46 AM
It's fun, short, happy... nothing too surprising, but the rhythm makes it stand out. I'm giddy for these kinds of rhythms, and I must say I'm totally biased because of it. For me, some poetry I prefer to read is in subtle whispers that poke you and catch your attention with every little pause... so this one got me.
April 25th, 2007, 12:41 PM
Thanks phantom_zangetsu for dropping in! ^__^ Also oni flygon I think that was the best post on my poems i've ever gotten. Thanks!
April 26th, 2007, 07:21 AM
heheh, its okay, hey hey, you know? i kida got inspired by your poem, so i made something just like that....well, a bit like it but....oh, just check it out later...hehehe
btw, good job again...hehe keep it up