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Blizzard
June 5th, 2007, 11:04 AM
Verse 1
Flowers, sleep at ease
Protected from winter's breeze
Blossom with the trees

Verse 2
In vernal's soft glow,
The moon keeps us safe below,
From what we don't know.

Verse 3
Summer, bring your sun
It's heat battle, everyone
Sprinklers are so fun.

Verse 4
Autmnal, bring bliss,
And with our first cold nose kiss,
The leaves fall amiss..

Yeah...
Sigh...
Feedback?

bmah
June 7th, 2007, 08:22 PM
That's a pretty well-crafted and delicate haiku poem.I especially like the last two lines of the last stanza:
"And with our first cold nose kiss
The leaves fall amiss.."
Implication of winter, I guess.

Melody
June 7th, 2007, 10:44 PM
Wow......now that's an awesome poem...