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Shelz4U
October 2nd, 2003, 12:45 PM
I bet you Im the first and only person ever to make a thread about poetry on PC.


Well here is one of my newest poems...XD..


Actually it is a sonnet.Here it is:


Sonnet #1

Remember to say goodbye when you can.
Remember the name of the one you love.
Never forget that your life is more than,
Just a symbol or sign like a white dove.
Please try not to cry or shed me a tear.
Forget the memories of pain and sadness.
No matter what happens I will always be her.
Smile and remember the gladness.
Laugh and share with your family a smile.
Your family hopes that you are fine.
Do not worry you still have awhile.
Death will not harm you until it is time.
We will sill always remain together.
Just like we were, always forever.

MoonLight
October 2nd, 2003, 12:48 PM
Hey Jess that is very Good i like !! Great Job!

Shelz4U
October 2nd, 2003, 12:56 PM
thank you.

Here is :

Tanka #1:

Evening

Bright Pink covered sky.
Darknesss creeps across the land.
The clouds remain calm
Scenary turns black
The only spectator a tree.


*NOTE* Tanka`s go in this sylable count:

5
7
5
7
7


I did not follow that though...:)

Kayleigh
October 2nd, 2003, 01:26 PM
Wow, it's about time we have something pretty to read! You're very good at this, Shelz. ^_^

Blaine
October 2nd, 2003, 02:26 PM
thank you.

Here is :

Tanka #1:

Evening

Bright Pink covered sky.
Darknesss creeps across the land.
The clouds remain calm
Scenary turns black
The only spectator a tree.


*NOTE* Tanka`s go in this sylable count:

5
7
5
7
7


I did not follow that though...:)

I like this one, the other was to luvy duvy for me... The line "The only spectator a tree" runs a little flat. I'd suggest a synonym or an adejctive for that phrase. Sorry, ^^;;;. Just a few suggestions.

Shelz4U
October 3rd, 2003, 01:14 PM
XD..Thanks !
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Winter Morning Sunshine:


Still snow covered pine
Blowing winds mixing with snow
Winter morning sun