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Burzes
July 22nd, 2007, 12:02 PM
Around the corner I have a friend,
In this great city that has no end,
Yet the days go by and weeks rush on,
And before I know it, a year is gone.

And I never see my old friends face,
For life is a swift and terrible race,
He knows I like him just as well,
As in the days when I rang his bell.

And he rang mine but we were younger then,
And now we are busy, tired men.
Tired of playing a foolish game,
Tired of trying to make a name.

"Tomorrow" I say! "I will call on Jim
Just to show that I'm thinking of him."

But tomorrow comes and tomorrow goes,
And distance between us grows and grows.
Around the corner, yet miles away,
"Here's a telegram sir," "Jim died today."

Please tell me how you like it.

41victory
July 22nd, 2007, 12:13 PM
Wow. That was a sad ending. It shows how time passes and people grow apart and usually forget each other.

Sad indeed.

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
July 22nd, 2007, 02:12 PM
That was great,

Very sad ending. I would hate to recieve a telegram telling me that My best friend has just died.

Very nice, I say it's a poem worth reading.

Rellyms
July 22nd, 2007, 02:17 PM
that was cool................................

Careful With That Axe, Pichu!
July 22nd, 2007, 02:22 PM
Great rhyme scheme and metric. Diction is okay too, good poem.

rellyms, you have been warned for spamming.