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Eliana
June 4th, 2004, 11:40 AM
Okay i got some im at school though so il post em when i get homeokay heres one:
the curse of hate

The Curse of Hate
for all my life I’ve been pursued,
by something which should have not been heard,
My life has been sealed, with this fate,
I posses the curse, the curse of hate
I try to run, I try to hide,
but it always finds me,
and burns me inside.
I want to cry, to fade away,
but hate hasn’t taught me to feel pain
why cant people respect me the way I am,
for I cannot lift the curse, of which I have.
but maybe one day they will see,
the person I am, and always will be
I dream of a place, where I belong,
where I can finally get along
but I wonder if this vision can be made real,
this place where I can finally heal
but if it cant, I want to make,
this world I live in, a better place,
but how can I help with my unheard voice,
I wish I could finally, make a choice,
but for now I live on, behind this blackened gate,
I posses the curse, the curse of hate

Kyosuke
June 5th, 2004, 09:24 PM
I'm impressed by your poetry, in some ways it describes how many people in the world feel about them self, wheter it being race, gender, or religion. I think you did a good job.

Eliana
June 5th, 2004, 10:19 PM
ThanKS!
I write good poetry when im depressed...its strange

Kyosuke
June 5th, 2004, 10:25 PM
I hope you add some more, its nice to read ^^;.


Heh ^^' I think I should start writing some poetry too, but it might not be too good XD.

Eliana
June 5th, 2004, 10:29 PM
Allright then here is my first!

Life

Life is but sorrow and tears,
where darkness rules, and chaos leers,
If Hope shall fade, Light will cease to shine,
If Light will fail, Hope shall die
When will peace come?
When will the clouds part, revealing the sun,
when will the bluebird, sing at dawn,
Instead of the crow, rasping its evil caw.
Life is but sorrow and tears,
fear not, for peace is near

lol this hsong had been rewritten 548349583598358345830548435683659845 times and i have no clue where the originsl is... actially i do!

SSMGoten
June 8th, 2004, 01:31 PM
I really liked your poetry. It is very unique and creative. :D

SSMGoten
June 8th, 2004, 01:34 PM
:cool: I really liked your poetry. :) it was nice and It was very unique and creative. :D

katfox2
June 9th, 2004, 07:52 PM
U are pretty good at writing poems!!!
Keep up the good work, cause ur poem is sooooooooo cool!!! ^_^

Eliana
June 17th, 2004, 09:49 AM
This one was dedicated to a teacher who died last year
If only tears could bring you back

These endless tears, roll down my face,
mourning for you, for endless days,
But I cant move on,and face the facts,
if only tears could bring you back.
Please watch down on us from above,
bring us peace, light as a dove,
If only I could change the past,
if only tears could bring you back
Life goes on, and never stops,
I'm grateful, for what I've got
I wait for you, on endless fields of grass,
if only tears, could bring you back

And i found the original copy of my Life poem and dude im freaked out..... i thought i wrotre it in Dec... turns out i was wroing.... november 26, 2003 0_O Keep in mind its the first copy so tell me if its better or worse thanks

Life

Life is but sorrow and tears,
where darkness rules, and chaos leers,
without Hope, Light cannot shine
Without Light, Hope shall die.
When shall the sun come out again?
will the clouds clear up, will the wars end?
will we be in harmony, soon enough?
will this end, this horrible lust?
life is but sorrow and tears, fear not, for peace is near

0_0 dude that is way different then the rest lol

+el_pal
June 17th, 2004, 09:57 AM
THat is veerry creative, unique and ... I can't mention all in one post ^_^; Keep it up!!

Eliana
June 17th, 2004, 10:10 AM
thanks! ^^ oh and i wrote a song,,, which mixes all of the poems together ^^

The curse of hate

I’ve been running, all my life,
My hope is gone, and my pride,
I’m waiting for my destiny,
I’m calling it to come and find me.
Why cant I be like everyone else,
I hope someday the ice will melt

Chorus:
This curse of hate is sealed inside me,
Why cant the pain stop, my heart is screaming
I try to run I try to hide,
It always finds me and burns me inside
This curse of hate is sealed inside me,
Why can’t it just, set me free

Why cant the world, see the true me,
Cuz’ this is the way I am, and always will be,
I want to make this world a better place,
To get rid of, all this hate
But how can I with my unheard voice,
I wish I could finally, make a choice…

This curse of hate….

This world is made of, sorrow and tears,
Where darkness rules and chaos leers,
Why can’t the clouds, go away,
Why can’t hope, come our way,
Why can’t the sun shine once more,
Why can’t this world be greener once more

This curse of hate……

These endless tears, roll down my face,
Why can’t peace come and pure all hate.
This curse of hate is sealed inside me,
I wait for the day till’, it lets me be

This curse of hate....

+el_pal
June 17th, 2004, 10:12 AM
YOur going to become a pro. poet when you get older, I know it!! I'm trying to compose a melody for that in my head...

Eliana
June 17th, 2004, 10:14 AM
No need! i already did! i could show you but i dont think it will work so i can send you in email! and thanks! il start working on another poem soon!

Kyosuke
June 17th, 2004, 10:52 PM
Yes, like I said before your poetry is very good, and its clear that others want to see more of your work.

And I'm sorry about that teacher, I'm sure that they would have loved to read that poem.

Eliana
June 18th, 2004, 11:53 AM
well we nver had her. but everyone jnew she was the bets english teacher in upper school. i justwrote another one!

The Storm
Lightning lights the clouded sky,
Followed by rain, hail, and the thunders cry.
This is nature’s power, a wondrous wrath,
Yet we know not, the strength it hath,
The rain beats down, hard and fast,
The wind shrieks, like falling shards of broken glass,
Then the hail, pounds endlessly,
And on top, fighting in the night,
Light and Sound clash, with all their might.
And then, as if it never came,
All is quiet, just the quiet, pounding of rain.

Starfish Prime
July 5th, 2004, 08:00 PM
Eliana, you already know this, but to everyone else, I'm gonna try to put that song up there to a rock rhythm. It will take a LOOOOOOOOOOONG time to do though...

Eliana
July 25th, 2004, 07:08 PM
Lol *revives* I have another poem i just gotta type it XD