Also - uh, after reading over it again - there aren't any aristocrats in Calis, not the conventional variety anyway.. Perinth is a mercantile and oligarchical nation, and wealth is essentially power. Also, it doesn't make too much sense for his family to have huge amounts of power but be unable to prevent one of their relatives from being murdered by a rival family (and I don't detect too much presence from them in your backstory altogether, except for the palace, which would probably be more like a mansion) - was his family ruined by something?
It's the line spacing ... I don't think it's my bandwidth, nor do I think it's a problem with a theme, but I'll just format it myself when I'm reading it. '_' I mean the lack of a line between your first and second paragraphs though (like this line right here below this paragraph).
The shortsword exists, as does the rapier. Anything remotely European exists, essentially.
I see nothing wrong with the formation of my SU, really.. lol Maybe it's just your bandwidth? As for the spelling mistakes, I think more than I type. Hope that's understandable, as I've no spell check. xD I'll fix 'em, though
Arianne ... hmm, where to start? I'll send you a private message on my vision of the story and what I have planned for that specific character. (This is partially /probably/ why I'm going to end up playing her, by the way - it would be fairly awkward for anyone else to do it, on second thought, because of specific plot-related details... x_x)
Note that her gender pronoun is never ambiguous throughout the entire thing, though.
Well the thing is I, umm.. kinda started writing about a character with a similar personality to the muse. xD; Maybe you'd like to have a look at it? I can write something else, though, I have something in mind.
Hahahaha, yes, that Eleusis. I do some Classics, so.
No, actually - you can just sign up for a non-legend character if you desire, since there are actually those now. (In fact since I'm writing the SU for Arianne myself, it would be ideal if you did : o).
I feel a little iffy about including extra people, but I think if your SU is very good it should be perfectly fine.