I'm back! sorry for that.... this is my second vacation in a row (i might take a lot more)
I liked the story it was pretty good but i think that you the pokeballs should be gotten later in the game and you might want to change your mom's walking speed to a regular speed unless i just saw it wrong and it alredy was at it. If your going to have evee as the starter pokemon then youll need to provide the evolution items.
Hey, I can surely use some of the stuff in the storyline you mentioned, but I'm really, really sticking with eevee, because it has so much evolutions you will have to choose a type later in the game. Look at this video, this is what I have already:
STORYLINE (SO FAR):
You start in your bedroom, you walk down stairs and your mom walks over to you. She tells you that you overslept and all professor elms pokemon he was giving away today were all gone, she also tells you to go to professor elms house.
You go to professor elms house and talk to proffesor elm he tells you that there is one pokemon left. He walks over to the table (where there is a pokeball) he walks back over to you and says "this is one of the pokemon i've been doing research on you can have it" you recieve a togepi (if you didnt know togepi's have no attack moves at level 5 so ill just change that)
Then professor elm tells you that he will call mr.Pokemon and tell him to give you the pokedex and that you should go to his house (he also tells you the dierections) and get the pokedex so you go on your way but you stop and professor elm says " huh.... thats odd it seems togepi doesn't prefer pokeballs." and he says " why dont you just walk with togepi that should satisfy it." " you can check if togepi is happy or sad by talking to it."
Then you leave to mr. pokemon's house but there are team rockets (two team rocket members) blocking the way to mr.pokemon's door, they battle you indiviualy Team Rocket 1 has a Ekans lv.3 and Team rocket 2 has a rattata Lv.4 if you beat them they say " the boss didnt tell us about any strong pokemon trainers in this part of Johto" the other one says " let's get out of here" They both run out of sight.
You enter Mr.Pokemon's house and Mr.pokemon says " I saw that battle out there, are you alright?" " you must be here for the POKEDEX professor elm told me to give you." you recieve Pokedex and mr.pokemon tells you if you want to be a good pokemon trainer go to ( the town with the first gym) and challenge the gym leader.
You leave and beat route ??? then enter cherrygrove city where team rocket members are everywhere and two members are blocking the entrance to route ??? so you cant move on. You talk to the team rocket member that stands out (Team Rocket Admin) she says that team rocket has regatherd here to find a legendary pokemon that has been seen here many times. Then Professor elms daughter come along and talks to the admin she says that the pokemon your looking for is her's and if team rocket comes in the way, she will make all of them cry for their lives. The admin says " Ha HA! your just a puny kid so run along before we have to take care of you the hard way" This starts a double battle between PLAYER & MYSTERY TRAINER/elm's daughter against Team Rocket ADMIN ASHLEY elms daughter has chikorita lv.10 and the admin has 1 Rattata lv.6 and 1 Zubat lv.6 when you win elms daughter tells you her name and asks how many pokemon you have caught (1) when she sees you have caught one she says " oh it's because you dont have and pokeballs," " i know! here take some of mine" You recieve 5 Pokeballs then professor elms daughter walks back to the route ??? that you were currently on.
After the battle the two team rockets gaurding the entrance to the next route tell you we will let you through becaus you are to strong for them.
How do you like it so far? sorry for the grammar and spelling crap i hope you can read it.
the legend of the game should be celebi and you will get all 3 kanto starters throughout the game
OTHER LEGENDS OBTAINABLE BEFORE NATIONAL DEX AND BEAT ELITE 4:
Lugia: Whirl Islands
Ho-oh: Bell Tower
Celebi: Event in ilex forest
OTHER LEGENDS OBTAINABLE AFTER THAT STUFF:
Mew: Event in Ruins of Alph
Mewtwo: Burned Tower