uh oh. You need more proportion, sorry. It's a good start, though. the source of light is a little thrown off, too. But it's still good. just not meeting our requirements. I'm sorry. You should make a thread here so that people can give you advice.
If you are using paint, I understand. I'm trying to make a sprite there right now (I usually use the GIMP) but it's pretty hard for some reason. XD
he's not on my IM right now, so i can't speak to him. Sorry.