Thanks for your remarks, they give me courage to go on ;D As for the long paragraphs, it comes natural to me - I like the concept and my creations, so I write so much stuff without even realising it. xD
I've checked out your chapter. It was neat, as always, I like how clear and simple yet entertaining your writing style is. I also sympathize with the character, Arthur; he seems like what most of us would be if we were the younglings of a Pokemon world. Good job man, good job, keep it up!
Yeah, you definetely have a very professional writing style, if you ask me. Given that I don't read much literature, other than fanfiction... But your chapters are quite long, and the paragraphs are just right. Looks pretty neat to me.
Oh, the GTA names are nothing - I've stolen many many more names from other games, as it seems like I'm unable to think of something by myself.. -.- exception is Chantalai's name. xD
by the way, professional writing style? o: are you sure? xD