"Now, this is just a slight irk for me, but it seems weird that Diamond, a ten-year-old, won't use contractions in his thoughts/speech. Unless this is part of his character, it makes him sound more like a real person if his speech is more real for who he is. It's just something to think about when writing characters. Think of how they would speak."
Diamond's not ten, lol. They're all 15 to 16 years old, as far as the main characters.
=D I have grand news. Sitting open in another tab of Firefox is the last page of your fic's thread. And in the Quick Reply box is the foundations of a review for chapter 45 from me.
I told you. I told you that I would give you a review. So yeah. ^_^ When you sign on Thursday, you should see a new review from me unless the forums explode, since I'll work on it after I get out of work, and I don't get out of work until after midnight. XD
And you need to update your sig. It says that the current chapter is VS. Alakazam, when it's actually VS. Bastiodon.
I'm really sorry that I haven't gotten around to typing your review yet. I had spent time catching up on your chapters, and was ready to review, but my college decided that I could handle three projects at once. But, I haven't forgotten, so I'll review in like...a month when I get out of school.