How would you rate this? It is an extract from my new fanfic. Here it is:“No! Don’t steal it! It’s my most precious item! Please, don’t steal it!”
“Enough! Fire Blast and make it snappy!”
“ *Sob sob…. Mum….. “
“Aaack! Huh? Oh it was only a dream. But the dream seemed so realistic. Anyway, I’m going to get dressed now. Mum! Mum!” Shouts David as he strolls to the bathroom dizzily.
“Huh? Coming! I prepared your breakfast! It’s your big day today!” Says Mum as she pours milk into David’s bowl of milk and cornflakes. She also lightly spreads butter on his light brown toast.
“Phew. I thought something happened. Well, I’d better get moving! I smell my favourite meal. I’d better get moving quickly!” Decides David as he puts on a green shirt with a pokeball on it before putting on a blue jacket and a yellow scarf.
After David finishes cleaning his teeth and washing his face, he smells an aroma of pancakes and rushes down the stairs faster than a Raticate. He sips his milk, munches his toast and scarfs down a gigantic piece of pancake. Although full, David was really full, even fuller than a fat snorlax. He couldn’t even walk; he was slow, slower than a Slowking.
Although the meal was satisfying, it made David in no condition to do anything. Just as he walks through the door, a mysterious red muscular figure appeared before him. It was team Magma!