Well, I'm not really in charge of hiring, but I'd say you still need a little work. This is still obviously the original Route Five, and there's still a lot of empty space. Not to sound mean (sorry if I do...).
Well if you want to be on a team you're most likely going to need to make them from scratch. The basics are just opening a-map and opening the rom and then map. Then go to file/new/map and then choose the name, dimensions, and tileset. Then you do whatever you want.
I like the looks of it. Before I add yo uthough I want you to post it on the team thread or on myfavouriteax s' profile so he can see it and tell him I told you to