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Old January 14th, 2006 (12:54 AM).
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Join Date: Sep 2003
Location: Canada
Age: 26
Gender: Male
Nature: Calm
Ahh too bad so little people tried the battling scene... I thought that it was fairly challenging and requires a fair amount of creativity myself. I don't believe that I a perfect solution to this either, but I'll share what is the closest I can get.

I'll choose Flygon, an obvious candidate for this challenge, together with (surprisingly,) Snorlax. Flygon has great type advantage over Donphan's attack, and its access to rock attacks can greatly damage Pidgeot in a counterattack after this incoming wave of attack. Snorlax is a powerhouse capable of causing tremendous damage as well. If Snorlax's trick work in this encounter, then Snorlax can possibly wipe out the opposing Pokemon with Flygon's help in one round.

Flygon and Snorlax will both have to use Salac Berry, as they need very desperate measure possible to outrun the incoming attacks. Flygon, being faster than Snorlax, can easily use Fly to dodge both attacks at once. Since Flygon attacked already, Snorlax can use its Mimic. Copying Flygon's Fly, Snorlax can also be magically lifted away from the attack. This combination of using two Fly attack will turn the table. Snorlax with its heavy weight from the high above will cause devastative damage in any form of counterattack...

The flaw in this plan is that mimic's usage is slightly twisted from the game. Right now, Mimic is capable of using the copied move immediately, and hopefully that isn't too much of a change from the original move. Another problem is Snorlax's speed in using Mimic, and charge up Fly fast enough to dodge Air Cutter before it hits... even the Salac berry may not be enough. As you can see, my answer is flawed as well, but personally, it's the best possible plan that I can possibly think of.

Both Dragonfree and Yamato-san's answers are creative in their own right, while both got the exact same possible flaw. Both answers sought to find a way to have one Pokemon completely dodge both attacks, while the other use an attack to negate Air Cutter. Gust's secondary ability to lift Sudowoodo, while causing minimum friendly fire damage towards it (as it's a rock type), is fairly creative. Bounce on the other hand is never heard of in anywhere, even in the game. Yet at the same time, both tactics require the success of either Gust or Swift to negate the Air Cutter attack. (Not really a problem, because I can't think of a flawless solution myself.)

As for eventidemjj's response, I think I talked about Protect being abused already... sorry =(
Quote originally posted by From Question #3:
Breezy: 0
Charon-chan: 0
Darkcharlie: 0
Dragonfree: 5 (3+2)
Eventidemjj: 5
Katsuro: 1
Light Azumarill: 2
Lilypichu: 0
Spoony-chan: 0
Yamato-san: 10 (8+2)
Spoony~chan: 2 (0+2)
Before we look at question #4, I'll first tell everyone that it got 84 words in the question...

Kakashi and Sasuke Lover: Welcome to our crazy challenge! Hope that you'll continue to visit us in the future. *You're* more than welcome to play, as we love *your* presence here. (You're vs your... Sorry, but you missed that grammar mistake in your response.)

Spoony~Chan: Yes you've followed the rules, but you also missed out the "your" and "you're" grammar mistake... sorry again!

Eventidemjj: No technical grammar mistakes... word count: 67

Dragonfree: No technical grammar mistakes either... but it's a 69 word count.

Lilypichu: finally you're playing ;p Lily has an incredible 47 for word count.

Now let me share my view on the quote...


"Don't worry 2 much about it. Said the moderator, as she sighed in relief. "Certainly, im sure that there will be visitors here again, just like before. Pokemon won't just die off as if it is nothing, because itll creat great memories in everyone. Those people who remember Pokemon from the past will eventually find this last Pokemon forum there is, and they will make this place grow again from nothing! Your my friend and at least there's always me here to support you!"

The mistakes that *must* be changed:
-2 has to be written out as too
-part of the quote is missing a closing bracket for a dialogue
-there are a couple of missing ' marks (especially for the contractions)
-"people'll" is not a valid contraction
-Your has to be written as you're

Places to reduce word counts can be:

"Don't worry 2 much about it."
"Too much" isn't completely necessary. It does lower the tone, but doesn't change tone completely. The original content is still alive. Using an eclipses at the end instead of a period can help with the tone a bit to make up for it. "about it" can also be taken out because the dialogue will continue, and it's not too late to reveal the problem one phrase later.

"Said the moderator, as she sighed in relief."
-saying "sighed the moderator in relief" can reduce word count

"Certainly, im sure that there will be"
-certainly, sure and will all suggest the same thing... keep one, and take out the other two. Using "will" can probably reduce word count the most.

"visitors here again, just like before."
-again and just like before both suggest what's in the past... keep again, and take out the other part

"Pokemon won't just die off as if it is nothing"
-just isn't necessary, so take it out. You can also delete "as if it is nothing" by directly linking on to the next phrase.

"because itll creat great memories in everyone."
-saying "because it lives in everyone's memories" is not only better (a stronger emotional impact,) but also shorter.

"Those people who remember Pokemon from the past will eventually find this last Pokemon forum there is, and they will make this place grow again from nothing!"
-say "Those who remember will find and make this last Pokemon forum grow again!" will suffice. This entire paragraph is talking about Pokemon as a dying fad, and it doesn't need to be repeated over and over again. "From the past" is redundant, as it's implied by the word "memory."

"Your my friend and at least there's always me here to support you!"
-say "You're my friend and I'll always be here to support you." will reduce the word count. Also, the fix sounds stronger in terms of the supportive tone for the moderator in comparison to the old quote.

Final answer's word count: 45 (almost 50% decrease in length from the original)
Quote originally posted by final answer for #4:
"Don't worry..." sighed the moderator in relief. "There'll be visitors again. Pokemon won't die off because it lives in everyone's memories. Those who remember will find and make this last Pokemon forum grow again! You're my friend and I'll always be here to support you."
Quote originally posted by Question #4 Results:
Breezy: 0
Charon-chan: 0
Darkcharlie: 0
Dragonfree: 5
Eventidemjj: 6 (5+1)
Katsuro: 1
Light Azumarill: 2
Lilypichu: 2 (0+2)
Spoony-chan: 0
Yamato-san: 10[/B]
Spoony~chan: 2 (0+2)
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