Thread: Ditching Janet
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Old May 14th, 2004 (10:49 AM).
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Join Date: Apr 2004
Location: London, UK
Age: 24
Gender: Male
Nature: Relaxed
Well, there only seem to be minor spelling and grammatical mistakes stopping this fic from being perfect. Since it's a trainer fic, description sn't really expected to be great, so you're let off the hook in that sense. The parts I liked most were the similes you invented to convey certain feelings. My favourite was:

Quote originally posted by ^^NICK^^ v.2.0:
It bounced like a fat baby
That made me laugh out loud... Anyways. I do have a question, this might me just be not reading it properly (I tend to speed read), but there doesn't seem to be a reason for why the trio are ditching Janet. I would have thought it would have been explained by Chapter 6, but obviously I'm wrong. I hope to find out shortly though. Anyways, the characters are staying in character... yadda yadda yadda :D

~ MCD
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