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Old September 24th, 2007 (7:23 AM). Edited September 25th, 2007 by Incinermyn.
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The Abomination Lives!!!
Join Date: Aug 2007
Location: Wisconsin, USA
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Hmm... The others already pointed out grammar/spelling problems that I caught before, so there's be no point in me telling you about them, Bay. Overall, nice prologue. Your writing style's pretty smooth flowing, at least to me it seems like it is, and I kind of like how you added some down to earth attributes with the college graduation and such. The only thing that gets me is how you said this is loosely based off "The Da Vinci Code." It was a good book, but I personally wouldn't want to try and emulate it, even if just slightly. Then, this does kind of draw my interest as to how you'll do this. I'll keep an eye out for Ch. 1.
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